Well, there's this pretty good Arthurian legend book called… uh… I think it was Song of the Sparrow. The whole thing is in free verse.

not bad

I really like this one too. Yes, you should assume I like all of them (except the Beast's last one, sorry, it was just the words "rather mixed" and "whole pile" were really ... out of character? though they fitted the metre, I suppose). Contrary thing that I am, I liked the first stanza best - repeating himself seemed to underline his unbelievingness and I love to see structure and sentiment match.

That was supposed to be chain of thought, in chapter 12 review; the problems with trying to type fast :P

Another thing I love is Merzale's rhyme scheme. I'm not sure if you meant it to sound like she has lived years on her own so is used to turning thoughts over and over in her head to herself, repeating the beginning at the end, but that's what it sounds like to me. And the Beast's poem about the first scream had a similar pattern, I think I'm totally missing something because it seems like he only just met (for want of a better word, him being unconscious) her now?

I was trying to read the entire thing so far all the way through because reviewing interrupts my chain of thogh and I was understanding it so much better this second time and being able to see the shape underlying, but this poem is so very very good. I love it, the way the children have their own voices and they talk over top of one another. "powerful mean" - with every one of these poems there is such a strong sense of the character narrating I am quite in awe that one head holds each one distinct.

Yeah. I really like this poem/story.

Thanks for dredging it backup. Doesn't time just seem to fly"? Ihope your senior year goes quite well and you keep on top of all the things you want and need to do.

Good Luck

Gigi

Oh, I really like this story! Doing it all in poems and everything, now that's unique. I've never seen it done before, but I'm really enjoying it! I like Merzale and Tousle's poems the best, they're way cool. I'm interested to see where you go with all this, what Tousle's point is, who he's talking to, and what the children are up to and whatnot. You should update soon!

Hooray for Tousle! Ah, his adorable syntax!

HEy!

Yeah. Updates. I love when other ppl update. I like this one. Is the had in side thing a refernece to Jesus or did you even notice the parallel?

And how does one dress in the normal way?

Shoes last socks before?

I like the plot.

Gigi

Sweetness! I wouldn't call a whole lot of gooey romance in this chapter, but the affection was definitely there.

that was a really good poem, I'm new at this whole thing so bear with me. Isn't Plasma aTV? :-)

I liked that one. Do you ever use capitals or periods or is that just Merzale?

I think that the rose is as much a part of the basic beauty and the beast story as the curse, dying, and them falling in love.

Room, doom, flame, blame, the rhymes work well for this poem.

Thankfully I don't own a mother like that but i have met a few of them. Goish it is hard to see it happening. And what's worse is when you are the friend,stuck there.

Awkward!

Anyways

this chapter is better than the last...Love it.

gigi