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Great story!

Ketchup is not awesome.

I don't why Ash would fall in love with that orange haired female demon. Misty is scary when she's angry.

(sweatdrops) the awesome power of the ketchup and the Sketch pad? Those two...

Misty really loves Togepi. And those two really needs to spit out their feelings before poor Tracey becomes deaf or hurt.

This is really good! Ash and Misty's love-hate relationship just never gets old!

HERO Mode! XD I think I did something like that once...sort of...

Wow, the manly men are such total, total saps. And Pikachu's a ketchup addict. Oy.

Wait, how do the trainers understand their Pokemon so well?

Bwahahaha.

A tad excited

to hear from me?

Okay. So basically this is overall amazing-slash- fantastic, but I have a few suggestions.

.Hmm.

I'm a huge fanatic when it comes to picking out the itsy bits of writing that dont click with me- I've done it to J.K Rowling, Ann Brashares, Libba Bray, not in person, of course, I'd be overly elated if I ever met them, but I critisize as if I'm being payed. Alright Raff. Here I go.

- Okay. In the beginning of the story, you wrote

" Bulbasaur, a dinosaur-like Pokémon with a bulb on it’s back, and Squirtle, a small, turtlr like Pokémon of the Water variety,"

Watch your spelling for turtle Raff. Hah, turtlr? Nice. Good description though, hes the one with the vines that shoot hour of his back - right? I like him.

- Nextly - ( I love not using proper grammar, makes my day when I'm out of school. YAY. )

You wrote

"-boy?” said Misty, advancing on the poor boy“Oh boy.." "

In the middle, the amount of "BOY" there is erking me. Redundancy tends to catch my eye, probably because I do it alot, honestly, I wrote in part of my book...

"She listened to her instinct and looked at the window taking a double take, looking like a fool, as she always did, nothing new to her to say the least"

There are like one-hundred "Looks" and "Takes" in there, shame on me. Shame. Hah.

- And thirdly, ( You've got no idea how much I'm loving the abuse of grammar teehee. ) When you wrote,

“No, but I do kinda feel like I left my legs back there…” said Ash with a careless tone.

“TOGEPRI!”

It wasn't clear to me whom screamed the first "Togepri!". I assumed Ash, but when someone has already been introduced to talking in a scentence you dont need to space it. If it was Misty, then relate Misty to it. As in add on:Misty cried, fumed, responded, blah blah blah. You know. So I'd suggest you write it like

“No, but I do kinda feel like I left my legs back there…” said Ash with a careless tone

“TOGEPRI!”

This was really great, your very descriptive, somewhat like me actually. Shocking. You use bigger words however, I go with the flow, I dont exactly have a natural wide spanned vocab. I find a word of the week, and use it.

XD!

Oh man, that was funny! I especially liked how Tracey questioned the "awesome" power of KETCHUP! Good stuff. Read and review my fics, especially "Mist in the Moonlight" and "Christmas Waltz". Later!

Writing: A Passion of the Soul

I read your ideas in your profile. My advice is... you should first complete the story you have already. Then... well, the first idea is funny, the second is... okay, and the third... well, use that as a back-up fic, in case you get ANOTHER writer's block (I know you will, these story ideas are perfect for writer's block).

I think you have a real talent for describing stuff, I was especially impressed by how you described Ash's staring in the first paragraph.

Keep up the good work, you're doing great.

(Grabs tissue and blows nose) Oh my gosh! That was so... (blows nose again)... beautiful! I... I... am at a loss for words! Well, not really. Ease up on the arguments, please, can't there be some level of kindness between Ash & Misty! Despite their endless rage, however, it was great. I'm bubbling up with anticipation! I'll be waiting for your next chapter!

OMG! YAY! you updated! how awesome is this! I'll tell you... it's TOTALLY awesome! lol this is great! it was so much worth the wait! and it's gotten me back on pokeshipping (i'm currently working on contestshipping) so thank you for that! I can't wait till you update this! I really enjoy your writing style! Keep up the great work! -

-Monika-

lol, hero mode, such a funny idea. not a bad chapter, well worth the wait. I only saw one small error, but its a bit too small to worry about so continue. This was very entertaining with the jokes and all.