awsome so far but hey i thought this story was going to end up being a gohan and videl story or is it going to e gohan and 18?

This is a neat story, at first i was a little sketchy about the gramatical errors and all but as the story progressed i began to like it. Keep updating please.

YAY! YOU UPDATED! Write more ASAP!

great story so far keep it going

i don't know if you are still adding to this story or not but the predators are called the yautja

please post!

its a good story alittle slow the only thing i really have a problem with is gohan using weapons I know he was trained with them but gohans to big of a badass to use weapons

YAY! TOOK YOU LONG ENOUGH! But I'll forgive you since it was such a good chapter. Write more ASAP! Does Gohan see 18 as a possible motherly figure?

What the hell does the eighteen thing mean?Don't tell me gohan's attracted to her in anyway!eeww!GOHAN/VIDEL FOREVER!

This is a very interesting and excellent story. I can't wait for the next chapter update.

update soon

Okay not bad I suppose, but it is going by too slowly. It was supposed to be part romance to but we havent even got to even the characters meeting and were on chapt 18. So whats goin on with that. Otherwise I like the idea behind the story and I must admit that your grammar is improving. Anyway if you do keep writng, I will keep reading, its as simple as that. Good Luck!

I have only one thing...two things to say:

1. Gohan/Videl

2. I love the story

Please Update!

Not bad, look forward to more, don't keep me waiting, lol.

good. i dont care about the mistakes as long as the story is good, and yours is great. keep going! -