I'm very sorry that you never finished this amazing piece of work. Although I must admit that it becomes very hard from now on to go through it, concerning the storyline. But perhaps you've some unfinished chapters in your box and will some day share them with the rest of your faithful readers, who are most anxious to hear what will further happen.

PLEASE, do finish it! It's really a great story, deserving to be carried on!

I am so so so so SO angry you did not finish this story. I've just recently read most of the longer KOTOR stories on this site, and yours was BY FAR my favorite.

me sad :(

Wow! That was a long 55 chapters but I finally finished. It really had me worried when Revan began falling for Treg but after that lovely, heart-warming chapter where they confessed their complete love for each other I felt so relieved! I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter. The only problem I had was getting confused in some chapters because you didn't really state who was talking until the end, if even that, so sometimes I had to go back and re-read a large section of the story. But other than that keep up the good work!

I just finished your story. It has taken all day to read both parts. I could not stop, I just had to keep going to find out what happen next. With your story I was on a roller coaster. I cried and smiles laugh and cried. I wanted to know what happens. Are you going to finish it?

I really like this story, Please finish it and let carth and revan have a happy ending :-) I'm a sap for fluff.

great job :) can't wait til the next chapter!

I loved seeing the talk between Treg and Carth, especially where Treg called Carth out on being hard on Revan. It was also a nice touch, that he threatened to "pick up the pieces" if Carth doesn't get over his issues. I like seeing the dynamic between Carth and Treg. I'm really interested to see where this is going to go, and is Revan completely lost to the dark side... I think she's stronger than these guys are giving her credit for.

good chapter

I sure hope Revan doesn't have to lose her memories again in order to be saved. That would be really sad.

I really like how Carth has started calming down and listening. And I love the challenge from Treg. But is Revan really as dark as they think she is? Drawing on the dark side can be done regardless of whether she's truly fallen. At any rate, I liked this chapter.

I got so used to Treg being evil, I'm just not sure I'm ready to trust him either. And if Treg truly is working on Revan's side then he does care for her. And I'm not as thrilled with that as I thought I would be. Revan used Treg to make Carth angry a lot and Treg was a rebound for her, I'm a little surprised Treg cares for her as much as he does.

Also what does the Scout have up his sleeve if he is "Not wanting to sap any of the strength that he knew Revan would need, he remained on the floor, trying to send her all the power he had just sucked from Gnillihs." Does the scout want Revan to win? An interesting Sith turn. The scout seems pretty convinced he can control Revan.

Gotta love Carth. He's just so obstinate. That scout sure is a manipulative one. Looking forward to more.

The paragraph when you describe Treg's initial thoughts about his experiments and trusting Mio needs work. I think it's supposed to come off as a stream-of-consiousness style thing, but it seems to be lacking the emotion impact of the consequences of his actions and his anger at Mio. You should express these things more.

Because then he launches into a triad of anger at her and before he had seemed calm and collected.

However, your ending makes up for it. I love the ALM part, I'm sure we'll find out a little more about them later. But particularly Treg's coming to terms with the loss of his unborn child was good. It's strange I had gotten so used to hating Treg, now what do I do... is he really on Revan and Carth's side? I'm not sure I can trust him, lol.

I liked hearing Mio's thoughts. The idea of her wanting to say sorry and not doing despite the words echoing in her head was a touch. It was especially well written that after her moment of emotion she is unrepentant, she doesn't want to change anything now. I wonder how and why exactly she is working for the dark side? More back story please.

By the way, the name Sargac is a different evil dude name. It just sounds evil, ugly, and gross. I love the plot twist that Revan helped to create her own problem: the implant. It adds a good theme of tragedy to the story. Sargac telling Treg the whole backstory is classic villian style.

A betrayer being betrayed. What a tangled web we weave... I really like the back story of Treg, especially as it gets more and more detailed and has more plot twists.

I don't quite understand why Revan says "Treg move!" right as the chapter changes to their battle. I'm guessing "Don't move!" was meant?