nice ending, i swear they should've added something like this to the game itself

kudos to you for a job well done :3

This story was amazing! I was really pleased with how it ended. I'm happy that Snowe finally learned his lesson. Great Job!

pretty good chappie

now snowe finally came to a realization:)

update soon:)

Good chapter! I like the fact that minor Razril characters are involved, as it's more interesting to hear their perspectives on Snowe and the situation rather than just the knights and the other major characters in the game.

Wow This story is really good _ Snowe really did need to find out what really did go on with the hero after he was exiled. I also noticed that you put an interesting pairing in the story. Not meaning it bad or anything but I really don't like HeroXMillay so the pairing you put was absolutely fine for me. Keep writing!

yay! you updated

anyways good chapter here

finally snowe is thinking about things in a different way

still colton sure does have something against him or is really just harsh

anyways i'll be looking forward to the last two chapters:)

pretty good fic here:)

the pairing isn't so bad either;) i like lilin:)

and the scenarios are pretty nice too

keep it up:)

It took long, but I'm glad you decided to update this again. _ Though it was kind of short for the long year's wait. Hope you update this story sooner now that you started writing it again.

The Hero x Lilin, strange pairing... but it sure is different than the usual Hero x Millay. Anyway, is all right, the story goes the way the author's heart wants it to go.

Wow! Cool, I like how you describe that everyone there looks like a big, happy family. Please update more soon!

I like this. Especially the way you treat Snowe-he gets a bad rep and I'm not exactly innocent when it comes to making fun of him, but he's a really faulted character, which is what makes him believable. But I can't help but smile at the idea of Kika punching him. Hard. In the face.

Update soon!

i remember that part some friend huh, glen was killed by he's rune and yet they (snowe and he's dad) would believe the "you murdered him" then anything else kind of like how r justice system works mob bosses and the rich get a slap on the wrist while the poor (thats how most rich view us middle class citzens)who did nothing wrong get throwen in jail jest so cops can show that their keeping the streets clean(not all cops are bad jest the corrupted and the ones who abuse their power and they alway's arresting minorties why are blacks Latins Asians and jews and such Minorties Theirs more of us and little of them you know wht i mean i'm not racist and i treat you by what you do Treat people badly of your own free will and i hate your guts be good to your fellow man and i'm you friend) good chapter later

"YOU CAN DO IT, SNOWE!"

ahem...

great stuff.

By the way...

Funny thing happened when I played IV: I named my character Burne without any knowledge of the storyline.

When I saw Snowe's name, I went 0.0

Oh, don't apologize about the cliffhanger! Cliffhanger's are good! The Dauntless is a big ship, make sure people stay where you put them and take into account the fact that they have to move. A very nice addition!

A bit short, but nice. I look forward to the next update.

A nice image. You painted the scene very well. However, there was no impetus in the prologue to initiate the action that will carry the story along. I would have liked to see some more of Snowe's thoughts or how he would react to what the ladies were discussing on the deck as a way to drive the story forward a bit more. But you did a very good job with the imagery and exposition. Snowe's one of my favorite characters from SIV and I would love to see your take on his life lessons.