| Reviews for Trapped In A Nightmare |
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  Guest chapter 14 . 8/29/2013 wow ...u really like to mak'em unconsious ...good work so far. |
 SamDeanLover28 chapter 20 . 2/2/2008 hi,your story is superb |
| Supernatural-Spaz chapter 1 . 4/20/2007 Hey, I started to read your story and I just wanted to point out a few things that were bothering. The main thing is you don't really go into any detail with your writing. Instead of saying "Slowly, Sam awoke in an old looking basement." You could say something like "Slowly, Sam was lifted from the haze of unconsciousness and found himself in an old basement. The smell of musk hung in the air, and Sam could feel the dirt and grim." or something like that. That's not a great example, but you know what I mean. Another kind of ties into the detail thing, your sentences seem short and choppy, making it seem kind of like a little kid wrote it. Try and make them longer. Like here this was a good sentence you used in your story: "Sam immediately felt pain. A seering, blinding pain that filled his head. He could faintly hear Dean screaming at Jerimiah. And then he heard nothing." You should wrire more of those! I also think you could have done a little more preluding to the murderer, or at least made the readers think a little bit more before you just slammed them with it . This is not meant to be a flame, because the idea that you have for this story is really awesome. I just am trying to help you improve for next time. Please don't take offense to this, I'm only here to help. Love, ~SLX~ |
| miochelle kelly chapter 20 . 1/5/2007 hey addie! remember me? if not thats ok. i would just like to say please please write you next story. i've looked for it and its not here. i really enjoyed your story. and would love to read your next one. please write it. love always michelle |
| Ghostwriter chapter 20 . 9/30/2006 Awesome. Catch ya on the flip side. |
| Raven524 chapter 20 . 9/30/2006 Good job on this story, liked the oc's you created as well as the way you treated the characters! Thanks for sharing! |
| samantha-dean chapter 1 . 9/30/2006 great! |
| BlueMoonDestiny chapter 20 . 9/29/2006 Nice. Loved the part with the whole latin thing. :) |
| kylie chapter 20 . 9/29/2006 way 2 go yo WAY 2 GO! lmao um yea amazing story loved it! great job addie cant wait for ur new stort! |
| supernaturalgeek06 chapter 20 . 9/29/2006 wow that was really good. great job! |
| pmsdevil01 chapter 20 . 9/29/2006 That was good. I really enjoyed reading it. |
| michelle kelly chapter 5 . 9/22/2006 PLEASE KEEP WRITING! i love your story it rocks please put up the next chapter love Always michelle kelly |
| michelle kelly chapter 8 . 9/19/2006 addie were is your next chapter? please dont stop i love your story! your a great writer love always michelle kelly |
| Katrin Van Helsing chapter 19 . 9/3/2006 PLEASE UPDATE |
| CatChild1 chapter 19 . 9/2/2006 Excellent story! I can't wait to see how it turns out! |
