Its 6th year I take it and did Harry not have is ban or Quidditch lifted.

This was honestly brilliant!
I really wish you had written the next year too
But, this was too good
You managed to do a powerful harry without it being cliche
Not to forget, perfect balance between all his friends and allies
I loved this!

Awesome story with many twists I haven't seen before. I hope you get back to writing at some point.

“bigger windows THAN the hallway”. Not then.
“anything other THAN terrorise students”. Not then.
“could’ve taken me to Grimmauld place”. Not could of
“Isn’t SAFE”. Not isn’t save.
“rather stay at Hogwarts all sumner THAN go home”. Not then.
“home to go TO”. Not too.
“Even more powerful THAN Albus”
“I BOUGHT this place”. Not brought.
“in more danger THAN his life already contains”. Not then.
“if it becomes TOO much trouble”. Not to.
“would you be any better THAN last time”. Not then.
“you’ll have to do better THAN that”. Not then.
“you can do better THAN that”. Not then.

Liking the story, but it’s riddled with spelling errors and could do with a beta read through, with attention on the use of then/than and to/too.

then
/ðɛn/
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adverb
1.
at that time; at the time in question.
"I was living in Cairo then"
synonyms:at that time, at that point, in those days; More
2.
after that; next; afterwards.
"she won the first and then the second game"
synonyms:next, after that, afterwards, subsequently, later
"she won the first and then the second game"

than
/ðan,ð(ə)n/
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conjunctionpreposition
1.
introducing the second element in a comparison.
"he was much smaller than his son"
2.
used in expressions introducing an exception or contrast.
"he claims not to own anything other than his home"

“Delivered it TO him there”. Wrong use of too.
“cannot afford to lose you”. Not loose

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Cho's not a Hufflepuff, she's a Ravenclaw. And determination is a Gryffindor trait, not a Hufflepuff trait.

Wonderfull story, i love it but i do hope the next book will one day appear.

Anyways loved the harry saves draco and the stumt hey had pulled in the end, never saw that coming

I NEED the next book!

this is a good story but i dislike the fact that ron was made Quidditch captain For One His Only Been on the team for a year so doesn't have much experiance in the area and two fuck the giant chessboard set It doesn't matter if he's a better strategist When it comes to Quidditch Harry knows what his doing so again Ron should not have been made Captain other then that very good story so far

That was fun. Poor Harry traumatized over Tonks buying him clothes. lol. I do understand though. I'm a blue jeans and t-shirt kinda gal and hate, hate shopping. his

cool. his

Dumbles needs his head examined. Leaving Harry there... honestly. his

grrrrr. The Dursleys make my blood boil. his

First of all... how rude it is to make an entire review say you're lazy and need to fix punctuation. Ok, so you need a few commas and semicolons, nothing so horrid as to have deserved that quite rude review. Secondly, I can so see Petunia making Harry do the watering at night, causing him to defy and break the law. I can also see her letting him get arrested if someone reported them, and making sure Harry took all the blame. I also believe that after 'everything they've done for him' the lights would have flickered more and then gone dark, scaring them before popping back on. Then I would have given them a grin and kept eating. sigh. If only Harry had listened to my advice. lol. his