This was awesome! :D Can't wait to read more.

LOL loved it now ive got some thing u can use.

BEDTIME STORY?

"FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK X OVER 9000!"

"dude why do u keep saying that"

"because i want u to do that to me"

"realy"

"yeah"

"then they fucked so hard that the bottom bitch learned to shit bricks the end"

sora was twiching as kairi finished her story and went off to bed.

then roxas came in the room saw the sad look on soras face and asked "whats wrong bro?"

"kairi said riku is going to make me shit bricks"

"oh well let me tell u a story to make u fill better ok?"

"ok"

"once their was a sad little boy name sora who was picked on so much that he lost his day he got it back but his shell was gone and without it he couldnt save himself from the one day a new kid came to soras school. his name was roxas. soon the 2 became friends and roxas protected sora from the when sora said he didnt have a shell roxas said"ill be your shell forever and ever"

the end now go to sleep ok?"

"ok"

then sora passed out on the floor and so did roxas.

then naminè started to make out with xion while ke$ha and jack sparrow sing their hit song "ive got a jar of dirt"

funny right please use this story ok?

bye. its over 9000! lol

THANK you!

i agree with everything, with the exception of "im going to cum" not being sexy. It CAN be, if used in the right way. But unfortunatly, few people know how to write good yaoi...

*kicks rock down doark allyway*

okay tht was hilarous! and soo wat yur saying is so true! anywhos tht was super-de-duper funny! !$!love::LexiV!$!

your those things are not sexy at all! and wouldn't a 12 inch fucking hurt? serously people should come up with sexy lines.

that was really amusing

I loved it! And its SO TRUE! I was cracking up reading this.

I'll admit I'm not the best at writing smut or whatever, but I've never stooped so low as to write something so corny as 'twelve inch cock.' Ha! Lol.

Pfft! Disney characters...

Ahahahaha! Omg, that was so funny I love it! Ok I'm officially hooked on RikuxSora yoai ;P

lmao bravo, I truly admire your sense of parody in this while still being true to the pairing.

hahaha

I love writting yaoi/yuri and I am in total agreeance with you. things like "harder harder!" and 'im going to cum' just aren't attractive. i liked your version way better (its more realistic to, come to think of it.)

...What...Okay?

I like it but uhh...

I don't mind Disney charactors... EXCEPT WHEN THEY'RE WITH SQAURE ENIX! DX I swear. half the time Goofy and Donald are making it hard to play! xO

Something you might say: "GET OFF THE MUSHROOM DONALD! I'M TRYING TO GET ON IT!"

Riku is an angsty teen. kinda like Harry Potter. forgive me for spelling mistakes it's super dark. xP omg you can MAKE those sentences sexy. you just gotta throw in a few "ah" 's XD

seriously. I don't wanna read ANY FanFiction involving people with Disney charactors. or Disney charactors with Disney charactors. it's kind of like "Wow. I didn't know Goofy and Donald liked each other in that way."

thanks for the pretty image. "exploding" xP xD

I'm not bashing.

"Sora? Straight? please. he gets it up for Riku. Or Cloud, or Sephiroth, Or Leon, or maybe Goofy or Donald. depends on what Fangirls you're talking to. (ew)"

~Fuu

lol that was brilliant HA!

LOL! I love this fic

so funny AND true

Perfect!

You should've made Sora jizz in Riku's eye. I heard it was painful.

Ok so i read this like, two weeks ago ?..or something, and well yesterday i started remembering specially the part:

"Aye, aye, cap'n."

"Cap'n? That's not sexy."

which made me laugh soo much, and i was like yeah i have to find it, and seriously it took me all friking day to find this but I don't really regret it. -, I love you for writing this.. even though it's not new ... well things haven't changed much really I've seen the worst things but well just wanted to say I agree with you and this made me laugh a lot!

byebye.