| Reviews for Air and darkness |
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   Reading Nut Cassirole chapter 8 . 1/19/2018 Loved it Loved it Loved it! one complaint tho... way to short... i wanted more... but it did end really well. I really hope you will do more on this story... a sequel i guess i should say... i really did love it though Keep up the good work :) |
| SliverFox1 chapter 8 . 12/11/2017 please make a sequal to this |
| Knifez chapter 8 . 12/8/2016 Cute! |
| Kris Senju chapter 7 . 8/24/2016 awww that's so sweet. |
| Kris Senju chapter 6 . 8/24/2016 ahh fuck this dude is crazy. |
| Kris Senju chapter 5 . 8/24/2016 are they sure there not in love anymore. |
| tryan9878 chapter 8 . 9/26/2015 that was pretty good |
| Space Unicorns chapter 8 . 8/22/2015 You are an amazing writer keep doing this stuff please for people's sake. |
| whitewind04578 chapter 8 . 6/13/2015 Whoo! This was good! |
| hikarijade13 chapter 8 . 6/9/2015 This story was a perfect blend of humour and adorable situations. I really enjoyed it. |
| BukkakeNoJutsu chapter 8 . 3/1/2015 Really sweet story |
| Guest chapter 2 . 2/3/2015 I could imagine tsunade being the 'now kiss' meme hahahaha |
| hinaru5891 chapter 8 . 7/11/2014 this is freaking awesome! i sooo love it! your genius in capturing true personality of shikamaru and temari..especially when shikamaru defended temari with that dumbass motoyoshi, it was EPIC!, i mean any woman would fall for that and knowing shikamaru to be very witty and temari was swiftly caught off guard, it was like i can feel what she felt like was, dumbfounded and dont know how to react, and it was kinda super duper cute and sweet! and the ending was hell yeah! this is a true writer, wanting to end the book but not the story leaving the fans wanting for more! not like any normal fairy tale book with a Happily ever after ending which is obviously very lame..Keep up the good work "wayofthepen" and more power! |
| videogamenerd101 chapter 8 . 6/4/2014 Aw, this was so cute. I'm glad things turned out well for Shikamaru and Temari at the end. As far as criticism goes, I recommend you use dialogue tags. You never used any throughout the entire story and a lot of the times, I was really confused about who was currently talking and I'd have to reread the entire conversation so I could keep track of who's talking. Also, it seems really unrealistic to me that they'd involve Shikamaru, who's probably only fourteen or fifteen, in a marriage. Maybe if he were older, it wohld make more sense, but at the age he's at, it doesn't. Nevertheless, cute story. :) |
| videogamenerd101 chapter 7 . 6/3/2014 Man, Motoyoshi is really serious about this, isn't he? I hope he'll just give up soon. |
