Nice story, laughable lemon. Not enough build up to the screaming if you wanted them to scream. I recommend just having them moan and groan. There has to be more descriptions of pleasure if screaming is involved. Well, you could have Yoh scream but descriptions of being overwhelmed by the pleasure must be present.
Decent progression of events. I like how you arranged their interactions.

Very nice fic. I have enjoyed reading it a lot. I hope you update it at some point.

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UPDATE! NOW! I'VE WAITED FOR 8 YEARS!

I love this fic-read it before and even though you're focusing on other fics, I will wait till it is updated/taken over by someone else (idk if you'd allow that or not); but otherwise perhaps multiple readers could portray ideas and drabbles and somehow we could collaborate it? Just a suggestion of course as this is ultimately your fic and I don't wish to intrude upon it. Not to mention I never got to this part in the manga. Oh well, that'll be on the list of neverending things to read XD

I hope that someday that you'll come back to us soon with a new update. Because, I'm really enjoying this story that you'd made. :)

U MUST UPDATE THAT WAS JUST ... *DIES* !

when are you going to continue? hope it is soon!

that was awsome but wat will happen to yoh will he really betray everyone? sorry for the question jus curious. any way hope you will update soon

please i,ve been waiting to much for this please update soon

Great!

I really like this story, hope you'll keep going with it!

-Jen

This it's good fic! But you should be more careful when using Japanese words. 'aniki' means big brother. Not that it really matters, I just hate it when people try mix Japanese with English, without checking the words first.

-Jen

UPDATE! I'VE BEEN READING THIS OVER AND OVER SINCE 2009 DAMMIT! . THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST SHAMAN KING FICS I HAVE EVER READ! I KNOW IT'S WEIRD ASKING YOU TO UPDATE AFTER 4 AND A HALF YEARS, BUT PLEEAASSEEEEE!