Good chapter, it’s still extremely irritating when you call gamakichi a frog though, he’s a toad. Also that bit about travelling at the speed of light being close to instant teleportation is technically wrong, ask any physicist and they’ll tell you that time stops when you reach light speed. For a photon no time will pass between the moment it’s emitted from its source to the point it’s absorbed when it reaches its destination.

That was an awesome battle

This chapter was really long, it would be better if u spaced out the paragraphs

Yo good story you have going. Read it twice still can't get tired of it and...hope you update it please?

I love everything about the first chapter except for two things. 1, the three affinities. Naruto gets overpowered as heck in canon without it. The training he is getting from everyone else and the proper education from the start will already increase that exponentially. It is straight up Mary Sue. 2, in the same vein as number 1, Naruto is speaking with the clarity and intelligence of an adult at age 5. No way. He is smarter here than canon, sure. But he is still a child. Dumb up the speech a bit until he is older. Other than the Mary Sue bits, good work.

Again.. one fight after another that Naruto should have been able to win with minimal effort he struggled and wore himself out in. How did he wear himself out though? He can summon the two bosses simultaneously, it tires him out but he can do it. He was able to not only learn the swamp technique, but spend hours making it bigger and bigger, much bigger than the stadium. He could create a rasengan with little to no effort and he could body flicker over and over again in training.

On that day he summoned two lesser summons, used a smaller version of the swamp technique only once, used a fire technique which even Sasuke could do numerous times, used the rasengan once, used the body flicker twice, unsealed explosive kunai and did three hits. He got hit one time. I’m very confused as to why he was exhausted after what, at least in regards to the Naruto you’ve portrayed until this day, had been a fairly relaxing day. I was enjoying this story until the tournament started and then it just turned to absolute shit, filled with forced struggle and inconsistencies galore. I’m only leaving this review because I couldn’t leave anymore on the previous one. I’m dropping this story now.. why can’t I find one decent Naruto x Kurenai story that doesn’t become annoying?

The ShikaCho fight was also horribly choreographed. Most of it was okay, but Chōji should have won. Not only did he know that once Shikamaru finished thinking, it almost assured his loss, Shikamaru left himself defenceless WHILE he thought. So he had a very good incentive to interrupt Shikamaru’s thoughts and had ample time and opportunity to do so whilst securing his victory.

‘Forced him’ to reveal the techniques? Naruto is as fast and strong as Lee, he could have won that fight with purely his body technique (taijutsu) but you fell into the trap most authors do, you made Naruto too strong for him to have any actual problems with his opponents. So in order for there to be some kind of predicament for him they make him weaker and less intelligent based on who he’s versing. He didn’t need to use the body flicker, he could have just dodged, he didn’t need to use the swamp, Kiba should have already lost by that point, he didn’t need to summon a toad, since again, Kiba should have already lost by that point. But you wanted him to struggle and wanted him to showcase his new skills to the public when he’s made it known he understands deception is a ninjas best tool. Inconsistent.

Holy crap. I’ve never thought I’d ever hear anyone else mention a frullet..those things were the bane of my last. Why my mother thought that was better than a normal buzz cut I’ll never know.

Great story.

wow great story so far a I can't wait to read. more

The Yondaime's name is Minato Namikaze and His wife is Kushina Uzumaki

no uchiha nonsense or anything of the sort

awesome fic!

Okay I can't tell if this is before we learned Minato's name but why Arashi? Where does that name come from.

your are the god of writing buddy