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keep going sugah'! lol

Love it! 3

This is good but you really don't need to put that accent on her words in this, no offence

hey i love the story so far and i cant wait for you to update it.

hey love the story so far! update soon plz

I like the storyline of this piece but I must say the writing is somewhat stiff, it doesn't feel natural. I just can't imagine Marie telling everyone her real name nor can I picture the scene where everyone rattles off their life story and powers in such a manor. Since both Marie and Scott are both 17 I can see them being immedietly attracted to each other and I hope there is a lot more of that, I also hope Logan becomes friends with Rogue too. I am a big fan of Rogue/Scott and Rogue/Wolverine parings so I do encourage you to continue. I believe your writing will improve with practice as mine did. I have found in my writings (All for One life to live, John/Natalie pairing)that details are key. You have to picture the scene in your head and then describe it with as much detail and emotion as you can. (at least thts what works for me! LOL)

Hope my words did not discourage or offend, I am just offering my opinion inorder to help you become a better writer. (as so many did for me) Please continue with the story.

White Dove

Good to know. You should update. I'm enjoying this so far. :)

keep going!

Lemme guess... you're about 11 or 12?

This amateur writing to the extreme. Marie is so secretive about her real name and she sees Cyclops and *snap* just like that, she tells him her name and her life story. And its mutual attraction at first sight? Unrealistic.

The southern accent and personality is overkill... Despite being the "southern belle" that she is, I think you OD'd on it.

Honestly, this story is absolute rubbish. Not exactly flaming it, but you should probably consider getting a Beta or... skills for that matter (:

okay thanks but i really do hope you continue the story real soon...i liked the first two chapters...plz do continue soon...

This is a great story so far. It is so sweet and cute. I can't wait to read the rest. I really LOVE the pairings, they are all my favourites! Please update soon, I wait with bated breath!

i like where this is oing but one question... how old is Scott in this one? Because i don't know about the rest of these people reading this but its very confusing to me...but greas none-the-less.

NICE NICE NICE

CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE

OR I'LL KILL YOU...

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE

SO NICE! I WISH I COULD WRITE LIKE YOU...

really good! keep going!