This is simply beautiful.

Honestly I have no words to describe how magical this story was. It was so rich in description and imagery that I'm honestly in awe. I probably have to go back and read any details I missed since there was soooo much to absorb. I love it!

/CLAPS/ My girl Persephone, pre-emptively arming herself! Clever, badass girl. I love your characterization of her asdfghjkl

Your writing is so evocative. Love that ending scene -
Persephone moved to tears over her joy of finding out that living things can grow in the underground. Creative concept.

YESSSS! A thousand times YES. I've been searching for the most satisfying reaction of Persephone to being kidnapped - the anger, the fight - and you wrote it exceptionally well. That beautiful fury and use of her powers, the not-cowering - 1000 kudos to you. I love her deadly anger and eloquent words. WRECK HIM PERSEPHONE.

This is a gorgeous telling. Wonderful work.

I know that you probably won't see this but your writing is fantastic. It's so eloquent and beautiful the way you talk and describe everything. Absolutely beautiful.

It seems like it could be good but some chapters are boring

Beautifully written. Great job!

Far and away one of the best retellings of this myth I've read, and this includes actual published works. Fantastic job with this! Thank you for sharing :)

Beautifully written...although you should have indicated angst as one of the genres because I couldn't help but cry in the later chapters. Kudos!

A wonderful introduction to your story. I liked the way you introduced the characters and started the story at the end. It's a nice thing to be able to do when re-telling such a classic tale like this one.

I have read literally thousands of fanfics and stories and tales in this site, bit I can honestly say I have never read such a utterlly, incredibly beautiful piece in english as this one. The writting is like poetry or a song, so enthralling and mesmerazing, it traps the reader in the words in a way I had forgitten. This , this is true written beauty! I honestly , from the bottom of my hearth, thank you for writting this fanfic, for giving me and so many other people the chance to relish in the wonder of ypur talent! Thank you! I can only thank ypu, I have no more words to describe the awe-inspiring, trully and really magic experience that was reading 'Persephone' ...just thank you!

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I love your story and the path you have taken, but chapters 12 and 13 are a bit confusing.