Ah come on! Your just stopping here! Tease!

good so far

great story wish would fin the stroy

I want you to read my words carefully. This story is very good. Great actually, but I, in my opinion, feel like you ruined the story. Why, well, Naruto was a complete badass, then Rin comes to konoha and the whole story just becomes one big...you get the idea. It's like you changed to a different story. I hate harems, and forced relationships. So the marriages just pissed me off. Now, you have a great story, and many people love it. It's just not what I what prefer. Like how some people like coke and others like pepsi, just personal preference.

Keep up the good work.

Lol, Anko-chan's a riot. Its going, going GONE!

Much better fight then the normal ULTIMATE FART OF DOOM.

Well, time to keep reading this awesome story.

this fic is really good keep it up

Ino just mind fucked him and hes not yelling at her?Whattt in the worrldd?-_-

Great chapter and story so fair pleaces continue the story soon.

Great Story

very good story, it has a excellent plot and development of characters. keep it up!

Interestring...

yo! you still alive? reply back if your alive and ticking!

(Actionliker)

I just wanted to know if this is a Naruto/Harem Fanfic? If it is, I will be adding it to My Naruto C2: A Hero's Harem.

Also let me know if you know any that fit into My C2's Description. They are stories that must have Naruto with at least 2 or more girls. Naruto/Harem, Naruto/Multi,

Naruto/Many, ect...

I like it, can't wait 'till the village finds out the truth. update when you can.

You seem to have a lot of issues with mixing up words that are pronounced similarly.

Since-sense

Are-our

Your-you’re

Their-they’re-there

To-too

Here are some examples I’ve written up to show you the difference.

Example 1: It’s been a long time since I’ve seen you.

Ex 2: Taste is one sense that people have.

Ex3: Are you coming or not?

Ex4: Our parents will be coming late.

Ex5: Your dog has brown fur.

Ex6: He said you’re going to the store tomorrow.

(“Your” shows possession, and “you’re” is a contraction of “you are.”

Ex7: My parents like their new car.

Ex8: They’re going to be late if they don’t get here soon!

Ex9: My cat is over there by the couch.

(“Their” is possessive, “they’re” is a contraction for “they are,” and “there” indicates a place.)

Ex10: Let’s go to the mall tomorrow!

Ex11: She will come along too!

Or…

She was too tired to get out of bed this morning.

I’ve also seen you confuse “here” and “hear,” and there have been several mix-ups when dealing with “quiet,” “quit,” and “quite.”

(Quiet is silence. Quit means to stop. Quite means rather or somewhat.)

Overall, your story is fairly interesting for a fanfic, but there are times when the writing can get pretty jerky and pull a reader out of the story instead of allowing them to smoothly read through. Still, I look forward to more soon.