It's good.

You're right, I didn't regret reading it. It was very good. Poor Riddick misses Kyra. Great job, anyways.

What a powerfully emotive story.

I love the attempts you made to describe his Zombie-like state

"like a ghost on fire, too dead to feel but so horribly, viciously alive."

The darkening night is like an indicator of his deepening despair. There is a sort of detached observation of himself which is exactly the way one feels when in shock or grief. You write it very well.

I really liked your ending too. The breaking of an iron will; the piercing of an impenetrable heart;the humbling of a man who for his whole life has sought guidance from noone. What a significant moment summed up in the word "surrendered".

This was completely sad. I loved it.

This would have been a better ending to TCOR really. It makes much more powerfull sense...

Damn good

"He looked like a man desperate to die and angry enough to kill. [...] he felt like a ghost on fire, too dead to feel but so horribly, viciously alive."

Wow! In the words of our favourite silver-eyed killer: "Beautiful"

Wow. That was really good. You have excellent imagery. You kept Riddick in character, but allowed emotional impact. I like!

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Oh! This was so beautiful! Wonderful one-shot! Beautiful images you are painting here and a very poignant view on Riddick without making him look like a sissy! Well done! :)

I'm adding this to favorites!

Beautiful.

Absolutely eloquent.

So right, I didn't regret that, absolutely fantastic. There's no words to describe how incredible that piece of writing was. You have to continue.

OH MY GOD! i'm almost totally speechless! that hasn't happened to me for a LONG time. this is fantastic! it brought tears to my eyes. the imagery, and the language and... wow, that's all i can say. bravo, absolutely bravo! ~Batty