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I really hope she's okay

Very nice story and great plot, I’ve enjoyed it

Read this story over on SIYE and I loved it. Had to find it on here so I could save it! Great job!

my biggest complaints are a lack of scene breaks, I feel like I got whiplash bouncing around like crazy. a general lack of commas, seriously, with proper capitalization, they're the difference between "helping your uncle, Jack, off a horse," and "helping your uncle jack off a horse."

I liked your story. That being said, I find a couple to holes in your plot. There were numerous incidentals, but the large one, for me, was why did you have Hermione entered into the tournament. She didn't have to be there for any reason. Tommy just wanted to kill the spare, so he didn't need her. She couldn't be the legal Hogwarts champion due to her age. You had Harry send her back as soon as she arrived, so she didn't add anything to his battle, which he won, not with her sent help, but with a pack which he suddenly became the alpha of, even though he didn't have the time to organize it. If he did have such a pack, they would have been miles away instead of conveniently waiting for him in the graveyard. You didn't clarify if they consisted of wares or normal wolves. Then you had Harry having to bite Ginny to prevent another from marking her, but she didn't turn into a ware herself. However you made her choose to be bitten once more at the end?
The added mini epilogues, done by skipping to small scenes in later years (a device I found rather interesting) did not add to the story. Even the final scene was redundant. We already knew they were committed to each other. I kept wondering why he didn't simply mark her in his human form with his hands instead of putting it off until the decision was taken from him by circumstances.
I hope you continue to write. Thank you for sharing this story.

I AM FANGIRLING SO HARD RIGHT NOW!

wow this was really good amazing i was really in the storry and i'm a little sad it ended but it ended really good you are a pretty good writer

A stunner hitting anywhere will knock the person out. Hitting Draco's shoulder would have ended the fight.

How was Ron on both Quidditch teams? lol. It's a little surprising that all the Weasleys are so supportive and understanding of Ginny sleeping with Harry.

You allowed rapists back into the school and only acknowledged it with a single sentence? Do you know how horrifying that would be to the would-be victim; that three violent rapists, who were willing to participate in a gang-rape and used an Unforgiveable curse are more important than her safety and well-being? That defies all understanding.

You know, this may be a cliffhanger, but I won't be reading further. Three teens ambushed and attempted to rape a 13-year old girl. Yes, she should have turned into her lioness and killed them herself, but that's beside the point. Any school that believes it's OK to assault and rape a 13 year old girl isn't a school that deserves to exist. I personally hope they all lose their magic.

The story has lost it's magic for me. I won't be reading further.

A piece of art

I feel you. I'm not even supposed to be reading fanfiction, much less posting, but at least I don't have siblings!

I hope you continue writing stories that are just as great as the ones you've written!