First chapter was so much better than the third , that’s where my compliment ends , because you wrote a story about Nami getting raped which I despise ,just as you said to show how her tolerance for drugs etc etc is high , so many other ways that could have been done , and how the crew treated him was so bad too

WOW THAT SMALL TRASH TRASH TRASG STUPID

“Your special to me, like meat”

The second version is nice, but I prefer the original

Not gonna lie, I would've been neigh apocalyptic myself like Luffy if not worse. My rage for stuff like that has no upper bounds, it starts high and then just keeps going. Loved the story work overall though:-)

I like the first one where you could just tell Luffy tried being the good guy and let him go but he just lost it and smeared that dude

Awwww, that was cute. I love manly, possessive Luffy.

Great story!
After I've finished reading, I skimmed over the original version and I have to say you really improved. The differences are huge. The new version is really well written. You put much more depth into it. Before the story was a little rushed, because the description of the emotions were missing a lot. The final version on the other hand had all that and that's why I really love it. You did a great job in keeping Nami and Luffy IC. I really loved how you portrayed the serious Luffy and how everybody felt that vibe coming from him. That's so him!
The only thing that bothered me was that Nami thought Luffy would kick her off the crew. I don't think Nami would do that. Especially after the water 7 arc, I think everybody in the crew knows that they can always count on Luffy and that he would never ditch them (not for being weak or anything).

So, it was really a fantastic idea to rework the original version. It was totally worth it. ;)

Awesome fic, there are just no words to describe. I usually stay away from fics mentioning rape and depressive stuff, but this one was just so good that I couldn't stop reading. Loved reading about Luffy's reactions and how everything progressed.

Bahahaha ok so I read the really long one and then realized that was your 'final draft'. When I looked at your original story I just laughed haha. Thank you for the rewite I enjoyed it :)

Of course, I hate rape but when it happens to Nami; I couldn't be happier. She totally deserved that and I love it when she suffers. Maybe she'll change her attitude alittle. Haha burn in hell Nami

really liked this story! I didn't read your 'finger paint' story though, but only because I respect the finished product too much :)

I really liked how you made Luffy possessive over Nami that way but most of all i loved how you showed Nami as the strong character I see her to be !

Quite spectacular! Well thought out, Luffys innocence was coupled him his fierce determination was splendid indeed! My favorite part was when Usopp remembered how Luffy addressed the crew after speaking with Nami. He was so passionate, this was a very good story:)

it gave me shivers just reading luffy's reaction... loved the story btw :) omg so happy i read this! its frickin bossome

I liked it better when luffy massacred them, it just seems like something he'd do in this situation.