I geuss she's Persephne now, isn't she. I really like that idea.

I wish there had been more

YESSSSSS! I love this story, I love the pacing, and I especially love the characterization! Most fanfictions I read lack sufficient plot, but yours has a coherent beginning, middle, and end, and it makes the story all the better for it. I have a list of fan fictions that I'm compiling to read out loud on youtube, and perhaps a podcast. It's still in the early development stages, but I would love it if you might grant me permission to read yours. It's just... fantastic. There's no other way to describe it. There are literal tears in my eyes as I'm writing this... IT'S JUST SO PERFECT! GYAHH! And there's a sequel! NYEH! Excuse me for a moment. I need to compose myself. Keep writing!
Sincerely,
Cris.
Peace, love, and discworld.

-sobbing- ahhh-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha! its soo boodifu! DX im kinda bummed its over QQ mehh!

ahhhhh! -wedding bells playing in my head- w yay! there finally together!

about this chapter: I just wanna give death a hug right now! the only person who is close to family rejects his company, and a girl he takes interest in seems to stray away from him. ): fate, you are a cruel thing. :I

finally. FIN-AL-LY! I found a fanfic about death falling in love with a mortal that is nothing like "meet joe black" thank jebus. ima go cry, and come back to continue this story. thought i'd give you a comment on how much I really appreciate you for writing this. im even happier that its based on terry pratchet's disc world. thank-u thank-u thank-u thank-u thank-u! _

Awesome story; never really thought about it before but I love Death as a character, particularly when he's on one of his weird moments.

Wow. Your storytelling is fantastic, it's very straightforward and simple yet vivid and impactful. I have not read Discworld before but your story made me very interested.

I really liked the story; a sort of reversal of the story of persephone in the end. Good ending, and that's really hard to do.

Your characters are good! Not many people can get Death right, and your OCs were for the most part very well done. I rather liked Devon, the poor feckless prat.

You obviously have a pretty good idea how to write, but you don't have a lot of skill yet. That is to say, you didn't three years ago when you wrote this. And your grammar makes my OCD hurt.

You have a better grasp of the use of a comma than Carrot, but that isn't saying much. There is an aphostrophe of possession and an aphostrophe of contraction: there is no ahostrophe of plurality. Your approach to homonyms seems to be that any will do.

You clearly have potential.

To be honest, I've never read anything in Discworld before(though I've been meaning to for a while now.) I'm glad I read this fic. It's sweetly awkward and I love it. -

This must be.. certainly have to anyway, be one of the most amazingly greatest stories i've read yet! You have just... just wrote is perfectly. The characters are too well done ("Too" is not bad at all!) and the the the, gah I've always had a hard time trying to explain how i think about things -_-

But I just Love this, truely indeed! I've laughed and... actully... cried ;. And i now got a slightly headache and my eyes ache... but it was more than worth it.. and the clock is late... typical. Well Worth it ALL!

This will be something i'll read later on again, and this will be a part in the book from now. According to me anyway. Death is now married to Elizabeth.

There is indeed a certain irony in taking Death until 'Death do you part'. I am detecting echoes of the Persephone myth here. Very well done.

"HOW DO I LOOK? Albert stared.

“Like Death, master…’s how you always look.” He said after a long dreadful moment.

Oh I *love* that line. It's no insult to say Death looks like death now is it? ;)

“There was a full length mirror, and a wardrobe. She had a look inside, just in case there was a selection of robes, but there was nothing in there except for a few old shoes at the bottom.

Old shoes turn up at the bottom of every wardrobe. If a mermaid had a wardrobe old shoes would turn up at the bottom of it.”

-Soul Music

So true. I've got at least a dozen at the bottom of mine.