Dear Cassie:

Just thought I should mention: It should be "the 422nd Quidditch World Cup". The 422 Quidditch World Cup would be the Quidditch World Cup of A.D. 422 - assuming there was one, which I don't personally believe. (I have this theory, you see, that Quidditch originally arose as a substitute for the hunt among the early students at Hogwarts, so it couldn't go back further than… well, never mind that. The point is, if the story is set in 1994, Ally and Anne Marie can't be attending the 422 World Cup.)

Sincerely,
Qoheleth

You poor, poor deluded Mary Sue fantard. I can only pray you realize the faggotry you inject into the Internet and make up for it one day by NEVER writing Sues again.

Can you spell "Mary Sue Litmus Test"?

You're on the S.S Sue Destroyer as a repeat offender! I didn't even know that was possible, though I can see why.

Is this the last chapter, cause if it is, that is just so unfair! Please, please, PLEASE, submit the next one!

I'll admit this one was better, but the opening paragraph made me bang my head against my desk.

Emotional rollercoaster! Am left hanging over the edge of an enormous cliff as required...she's got to find their pulses! Or the necklace has to have some special power which can bring them back - but I don't know. Gr. Next chapter? *_*

if the are dead i will cry...and cry some more

SJFBCDIUSFGBVHJGVFNXHGVNFDJD SAY WHAT?

now thats just mean...

you cant just leave it at that my young mind is imploding with millions of things that could have just happened...

Two OCs you admit have more powers than the average witch, bad infodump first chapter... epic fail.

please rite another chptr! Im desprat! Im riting from my PSP!

Cliffhanger! *_* The last few chapters have been amazing, I've just read them all in one go, and desperaterly need the next one! The cliffhanger is clever because we're waiting anxiously in exactly the same position as Anne Marie. This chapter also has many more little details of their reactions, which really works. So yes, I'm singing your praises over here and looking forward (with apprehension!)to the finale...next chapter!

cedric you idiot

Sorry about delay reviewing. This is very good - I especially like all the necklace twiddling! Suggestions - you describe their basic movements clearly, which is good, but doesn't give us so much of a feel for the different characters. Maybe you could "zoom in" sometimes, so we can see the small reactions to things. Also you could use some other senses, like touch (one of the reasons I like the fiddling with the necklace, I think, as it gives an idea of how something feels) though it shouldn't be too much or it will distract from the main action. Overall though, it's really vividly imagined and well written!

YAY AN UPDATE...and poor anne marie...just please dont kill cedric