Great story loved it

Nice story! Thanks!

Tickles? The literal best. I love this

A lovely story about the brothers

This was so adorable! The characterizatiins were so spot on and seem to fit the younger versions I have in my mind of today's Don and Charlie.

Ugh... I could just picture little Charlie walking away and I might have died a little inside. Haha. Kids can be so mean... Good story.

That was AWESOME! I identify a bit with Charlie so this made me cry a lil. But was firmly overshadowed by the end. ... I'm still grinning like an idiot. XDD

My heart went out to poor Charlie in this story. From his own attempt at a high five, the realization that Don had lied to him and the wounded eyes searching out Don throughout the week was enough to make my own heart cry. The interaction between all of the characters is well written, and Don's invitation and horseplay with Charlie was enough to make my heart smile. :)

Awww! That was adorable! I loved it.

I loved it. Sweet and adorable...Thanks for posting. :)

Very nice. The brotherly rivalry was spot-on, and difficult to read; my sons are 4 years apart and very different than each other, too.

Glad Charlie wasn't mortally wounded this round ~ I was just waiting for a collapsed lung or a concussion to pop up.

This story was a bit painful for me to read, as I've been in both brothers positions before. But knowing how it feels made the whole thing more realistic. I loved how you showed the origins of Chuck.

"“Nice catch, Donnie.”

“What?” said Don, distractedly changing bats. “Oh, yeah, thanks.” He ruffled Charlie’s hair absently, grinning as he passed. “Go sit down.”" Aw, *faints from fuzzywarm attack*

"Charlie stared down at his plate morosely. First, Don had ignored him and didn’t let him in the game, and now he was grounded. To top it off there were peas on his plate. He hated peas." You have the child mind down to a T.

"He pounded his fist in his glove, unconsciously echoing his brother," I LOVE how you made him be all, *copies Don*.

So cute how Don, even as a child, was trying to protect his little bro. But of course, I should've expected that, 'cause that's where all the protectiveness started.

That jumping-over thing Charlie did. I think I saw that happen in real life, on AFV.

Cutest...ending...EVA!

Aw, cute ficlet.:) Young Charlie sounds absolutely adorable.

That was adorable! Great snapshot of their lives growing up. Don and Charlie were painted realistically. The dialogue and inner monologues rang true. I thought it was great that Charlie came back from such a terrible disappointment the first game to helping Don win the second. The little details of how the games played out were terrific and added to the verisimilitude of the piece. Also loved Margaret and Alan - dead-on parental interaction, both with the boys and with each other. Outstanding job. :)

Ah, brotherly love. YOUNG brotherly love. Not as good as Charlie-whumping (cough, cough), but still good.

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Oh, who am I kidding? I LOVED IT. Write more!

Just don't let it get in the way of writing _Marked_.

-SMARTALIENQT :)