Reviews for The Gambit
Sabastian Burlis chapter 63 . 5/24
Wish you would continue this! Its so good!
Pokemon chapter 15 . 2/29
It's annoying to read gauto all the time instead of gato.
The numbers are also rather big for the ass end of nowhere... A hundred man effective working force whilst the regular day to day stuff still needs doing is simply too big for such a location.

At best, 30 to 40 people in a community the size of 500 hundred could be mustered in such an age. That's like almost 1 in 10 considering most would be kids...

The middle ages sucked like that. 100 men was an army already...

I do like the arc so far, but the story does seem rather high on drama... Like bold and the beautiful level drama... The only reason that hadn't gotten me to drop it yet is that you have pretty damned good action going on.

So I look forward to reading more, your not sticking to Canon like a kid who swallowed superglue which makes it a lot more interesting to read. You also went a harsher more realistic route then talk no jutsu. Which I suppose is your thing. Gj
Pokemon chapter 8 . 2/29
I think the soulbound connection at the end is too overdone.

I did like the actual chapter well enough save for the fact that Konohas number one genjutsu expert was like a civilian in the face of a genjutsu...

You might as well have her walk around in a bikini with a tag prostitute for hire because in this mission, you made her useless in her own field.

Had she simply been occupied by a particularly good samurai and unable to capture him in a genjutsu or something then it would have been fine... But this is like Tony stark being unable to make make a simple light bulb work because he doesn't understand he needs to twist it into the socket...

Its that rediculous.

Hense. I would edit this chapter to have her simply be occupied by a good opponent instead of being owned in her own field by a nameless canonfodder adversary. When she's supposed to be a jonin and the expert on genjutsu in Konoha...
Pokemon chapter 6 . 2/29
The story is alright so far if a bit too heavy on magic like stuff and Mysticism.

Self invented supposedly common jutsu infused throwing weapons and stuff takes it a bit far when supposedly, almost everyone sucks at seals which were used to make these...
cannibal27 chapter 12 . 8/13/2019
I gotta say, this isn’t bad but killing people doesn’t equal good storytelling. You’re relying on agregious injuries a bit too much
cannibal27 chapter 8 . 8/13/2019
Me up to this chapter: this seems pretty basic and uninspired but I’m curious so I’ll keep reading
Me Now: What the fuck just happened you motherfucker
nielnica12 chapter 33 . 6/23/2019
Is ino gonna be the new demon vessel? Omagerd
nielnica12 chapter 31 . 6/23/2019
MASAKA!
nielnica12 chapter 27 . 6/22/2019
Wtf... i thought its a naruino so why u killed ino?
nielnica12 chapter 26 . 6/22/2019
Rasengen.. rasengAn mdfkr
nielnica12 chapter 18 . 6/22/2019
You shouldn’t have given hine the Mangekyō if you’re worried about OP character. I mean Sharingan is already a power up in this point of the story. Is what I would’ve said if I read this fic at the time when this review mattered
Hufflepuffsuckeggs chapter 1 . 4/26/2019
Very good first chapter, and very polished as well. It brought out a lot of emotion.
SleeperHold27 chapter 13 . 2/14/2019
Honestly, I have mixed feelings on Shikimaru being an ANBU recruit. On one hand, his analytical mind and potential as a leader/tactician are great reasons for this decision. However, on the other hand, he is young (yes 12-13 is young for ANBU), inexperienced, and I feel like pulling him off team 10 takes him away from kids his age, a trend we have seen hasn't been constructive to a developing "kid's" mind (Kakashi, Itachi). So all in all, I'm torn. Hope he doesn't completely lose the carefree attitude, I still to an extent love that part of him. Well I will see anyway since this fic is finished; just giving my thoughts.
kuro02 chapter 2 . 11/25/2018
old but gold
ProtoAlgo chapter 58 . 11/19/2018
Lives the smut on this chapter, though I'm sure you have your reasons not to continue the story, I'm truly dissapointed, I've been reading this for a long time and it saddens me to see it end so abruptly.
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