Wow. It amazes me how you managed to put all of this in such an order that it has the effect it has.

Lovely.

Very very intense and emotional. I love how you can deliver such intense emotion with the repetition and the vague sentences. They did their job so well that it's almost phenomenal. I love how everything flows. I feel disgust and at the same time agony over how things went. I love this fic. Very beautifully written. Great job!

Beautiful. It was a level of well-organized that actually shocked me for a moment, but you managed it, and the story flows so well, and you can tell whats going on so fully that it's more like each line is a whole paragraph of plot that you didn't need to write in because you can do it in a few words.

What can I say but Bravo. *favorites*

- Kitsune Alchemist

Aww, it made me cry. Beautiful.

Eff.

wow,thats almost scary in its awsomeness Xx".I could truly imagine axel to be like that Oo!

keep up th good work :3

Twisted. I'll admit I usually backspace "poem" stories after a few paragraphs, but this one pulled me in and wouldn't let go. It was so cute at the beginning, but I knew it would probably go downhill because of the warning. I think that made the "cute" parts all the more intense and effective, though. Great job!

This literally made me cry.

Amazing job.

~KarimaTinCan

Funny how I keep thinking I've reviewed this already. Funny, 'cause it's one of the stories that sticks out in my mind the most. It's so eerie, and the way you write it makes the whole thing seem so realistic ... well, it's made of awesome on awesome, and I should have told you that already.

Anyway. What can I put into detail?

I love the structure, how it all looks and feels so poetic, but it's so much more like a story, if that makes sense. I like the idea of one mistake ruining everything, forever. Like ... irriversable (sp?) sin. And how yet another mistake ruined the everything that already WAS ruined. And I just made that sound really confusing, but I don't really know how to explain it. Maybe I got my point across.

Getting past my confusing-ness - amazing story. Because the word one-short doesn't do it enough justice.

I usually hate poem stories (I just can't get in to them but I have nothing against them as I myself write poetry. So don't accuse me of true hatred). This one is different though. I think it's beautiful and rather dark. And emotional. You can kind of feel the helplessness Axel feels throughout the whole thing. I like the story that goes along. Really, it has its own haunting beauty too it. I love it, I adore it. Have a great day!

beautiful.

absolutely beautiful

A fantasticly well written oneshot. Great job.

omg. you made me cry.

and my mouth fell to the damn floor!

That was AMAZING.

Im glad you told me to read it!

*faints*

Roxas...dies!

Sora...cheating with Axel?

Axel...cheating in the first place!

ah...im dying at how well this was written. How do you do it! I'm jealous *pouts*

agh...i'm feeling angsty now...i will go finish my Roxas/Riku masochist ficlet now...

ILY!

~Jojobeans93

*teary gasp* I'm not sure if I breathed at all during that. It started so cute, but I was on my toes, because I saw the warning, and knew it all had to go bad. And then, oh no, I saw he went with SORA? AXEL how could you? And what now, he hides it for a while? Sora, how could you? But then Roxas knows... and moves in with the person Axel cheated with? And then... it all ended.. and you of course left me with chills. Adoration darling, you're almost too powerful for words. Excuse me while I go rave about this to everyone who will listen. *bows*

You told me there was nothing i can do, but guess what? I can NOT review. MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Wait, i just reviewed. My plans foiled again!

That was truly beautiful! I loved it, congratulations :D

It deserves so many more comments, that's a pity, but still this was just gorgeous, congratulations again!