I'd dock a lot more than just ten points for a RedSox's hat.

I was prepared to completely hate the concept of this, but it turned out quite well.

very good!

Sit-and-Scratch... a close relative of Scratch-and-Sniff.

Triad makes them sound like oriental mafia. Personally, I think Blast would make a good team name, and I don't think it's been used.

Fun story, but I think you inbibed a bit too much from JKR's bottle. Sometimes hockey is just about having fun beating the other team up with sticks.

This is wonderfully well-written. You really gave Jimmy a personality; he's very rounded out. You had me cheering for the Triad like crazy! I love this. I caught one or two typos, but nothing major. (I'd point them out, but I forget where they were and I'm on a time limit:p) Some of the minor characters were a little flat, but of course they're minor characters, so it's understandable. Overall, awesome job! :)

~Rae

great story _

Great chapter! i liked this story!

when this was first suggested to me I didn't think i would like it. I;m not a hockey fan , but I said i would read what people suggested so i gave it a shot,. I was raely surprised to find it aas an amazing story (Not that i didn't think you were a good writer or anything I just didnt think i;d like it) I thought thatv it had great action humor, and a plot that really kept me wanting to read more. This was great And I will probably go read some of your other fics now

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Again an amazing piece of work! I liked it from the beginning on.

Jimmy as the "new kid" from America, having a hard time fitting in. I know that oh so well, as I am in a similar situation. But then came Fred and George, offering them their friendship. And then it all started. :)

I loved it, how you built up that hockey thing. First everyone was a bit unsure about it but then, it became something uniteing the students. And you know how to build up tension and describe your characters feelings! I really felt with Jimmy! And, of course, you gave the readers the impression, that there is more than Harry's adventures in the wizarding world. It makes it... so real, I don't know how else to describe it.

I'll keep on reading. ;)

Lisa

Wow, what a doozy. What an all-out, no-holds-barred doozy! This story could have been multi-chapter easily.

I LOVED how you wrote the opening scene. And it just went on from there. The wedgie hex was hysterically funny - did you come up with that?

The progression of Jimmy O'Bannon's status from being in the hole with no buddies at all to a few tentative acquaintances to a kind of roller coaster where his fan base rose and fell outside the core group... VERY well done and VERY believable. I wondered about Dumbledore's motives for hovering in the background and subtly encouraging this whole endeavor, and that made sense in the very end.

The pre-game antics of both teams were great. I loved the mutual spying (reminded me of the NFL's Jets/Patriots Spygate scandal, actually) and the Slytherin attempt at cheating by NHL Greats potion. *laughs*

Awesome head-banging over what to even name the team (an experience I know all too well), great description of the pre-game knots and butterflies (another experience I know all too well), and the game itself... whoa. You could about feel the thunder of cheering feet against the stands and hear the blades cutting the ice. It was breathtaking - and it was like BEING there, even for a reader! I loved all the colorful sports slang you threw in (extra writer's benefits because of your occupation). The action was wildly exciting, and I didn't know which way the game was going to turn out. I really didn't. Awesome job of making the ending very, very difficult to predict - a real feat in a sports-oriented story.

That broken ankle Jimmy sustained was so powerfully real that I about felt it - yet another experience I know all too well, though with knees instead of ankles.

This whole thing was Cup-worthy. That was way too much fun for a single-chapter story! Another fine addition to my favorites list.

Hmm. *leans back and narrows eyes* You know, it would be really interesting if Violar could meet your Jimmy O'Bannon. Just a thought. *grins*

Write on!

Jazzcat

wow! I never thought I'd find a hockey at Hogwarts fic! I love hockey! Gotta say I'm a Caps fan though! Awesome story! I have never reviewed a story before so take this as a BIG compliment! Jimmy is such a believable character and great use of imagination. I will def read your other stories when I get a chance. Keep on writing! ~Wolfash

After reading Air of Disharmony, I decided to read some of your other stories, and I really like this one. It was really well-written and the hockey game was a lot of fun to read. Though my personal favorite moment was McGonagall catching Jimmy sleeping in her classroom. He's lucky he took off running when he did, no telling what McGonagall would have done if he didn't...Especially after that "Nappy time over" comment.

This is such a unique idea! It sounds so crazy in the summary, but you pulled it off really well. I loved Jimmy and the world you built around him in America, with the Witch's Institute and their hockey league and such, and you characterized all the canons so well, even the ones who don't get a lot of book time - I especially enjoyed your Susan. Off to read more )

That was really awesome. I mean really. I actually read 'Moving On' (I think that's what it was called) first, because I didn't really know that this was a series, I guess you could call it. Jimmy interested me, and I found myself wanting to read more about him.

I enjoyed reading about the game; it had the same effect the Quidditch Final in POA did. I also liked the beginning when O'Bannon still hated everyone and he was imagining the pucks as different people, who coincindetally were all some of my favorite characters (except Snape).

Wonderful story, and now I'm off to read your other works. :)

Wow, I loved that story! The hockey game was exciting and suspenseful, the main character being an OC didn't drive me crazy like it usually does, and Dumbledore's speech at the end was right on point. Thanks for the read!