Where was Dark?

This story is just jumping around with no details. Everyone just knows her and that is that. She hasn't even had a single conversation with another they just talk at each other.

At 20 she would be a toddler of an elf, considered very young

Just when it was getting epic ;-;

I understand what you mean about the problems you have with this story, but I still enjoy it nonetheless. I hope you keep the last two chapters the same though because I agree with you: I love the change in Legolas's attitude. I love sad/pitiful Kagome moments regardless!

Thank you for your work so far, I greatly enjoy it.
P. S. Don't pay any mind to negative comments, your trying to better yourself, there's nothing wrong with that.

First Impression: A bullshit chatlog between the author and a fake character. Already starting on the wrong foot here.

...uhhhhh...I mean great to know that you'll be reviewing and changing the aspects of the story that was too rushed or just overall felt too unrealistic but...ITS BEEN YEARS!...How long must we wait...

Oh shit, not again. Motherfucking bitch just has to ruin everything right?

Kagome faints too often...and this 'relationship' that they are currently nurturing seems to be moving at a fast pace.

A LARGE TENTACLE MADE ITS WAY TOWARDS HER...hmmm I honestly can't be the only one who thought of something not entirely too innocent when they read that...but BAHJDBAHDBAHSJSH

Kagome needs to act more like she does/did in the secret council.

*Gollum

This is an awesome ff! I hope to read more chapters in the future!

I love this story and love to read more chapters in the future.

I hope you download this story quickly, I'd love to keep track of how it goes on !