it took me three tries to read this story and all of them are because of the Niata paring, if your like me and was initially scared off by chapter 2, don’t worry the paring isn’t as bad as you think

Damn. Even after around 10 years this is still some of the best writing ive seen. I love your writing style. Did you ever get around to writing your novel? I would love to purchase and read it!

aww man. its probably been about 9 years since ive read this, and its bringing back some great memories. cant wait to re-read the rest!

god, this is such a god awful fic. theyre 12for fucks sake. yall cishet white men are all the same. yall write shitty ass fics

It started out really nice, and then becoming darker, which I liked. But after some chapters the story just went downhill. Poor character development, poor plot.

It had so much potential but you ruined it.

I had to look up "nonplussed" you've expanded my vocabulary thanks.

I read this fic from Viridiandreams discussion thread and honesty I love this. Badass new team 7 with the hit as Hinata rlly cool. I believe you still live out there so don't worry. Please don't heed any whining said you're not around, you deserved rest and maintenance. I'll wait patiently when you'll back and finish this nice fic

It has been Nine years since this was posted, almost to the day. Portentous. I remember when this chapter was just posted. It was a different world. Still, to this day. When people ask me why i read fanfiction, I point them at this story. Even incomplete it captures the imagination in ways I find compelling even nearly a decade later.

To Nugar, I say, thank you deeply for this thing you gave us all. The characters so richly realized, the flaws so humanly displayed, the mystery deepening point by point. Sadly I don't have any real coherent criticism to levy other than perhaps an over reliance on cultural injokes at times that can badly date the story to those who have lurked long enough. Otherwise, still one of the best things I've read, and I hope you've found good things in the time since you left.

I am very confused.

Well, I lost track of shit here and can’t go on.

Thanks for the read though, fun while it lasted.

This seems so pointless. It's a horrible characterization that's not supported by anything. Naruto has people in his life that give him positive attention and advice and yet he only knows how to use people? What.

Dead story? :(

Fight club?

3 chapters of him not trusting anyone you switch him back to guliable dumb canon naruto. If you build your character separate from the canon he can not suddenly be gulli2 and stupid when you've apent all this time reinforcing the idea of him being exactly opposite. This chapter was nice but the way you got here was disappointing and hope this isnt a writing formula you use other then this one slip.

what the fuck? how did naruto turn into a fucking retard in the space of a few seconds when mizuki said he had a mission for him? you just destroyed the image you had built up for this naruto and instead just went with the canon retard. you didn't even give a reason for why he trusted mizuki even, Just him crying "I trusted you"