Rape helps him see again?
Okay. I can deal with that.
Nice concept.

I thought Fang has black hair?

Maybe you should use line breaks...its really confusing to read.

Iggy is so awesome, he can cry while sleeping.

F***k that is hot and really good.

I loved it
Amazing story keep up the good work

Finally! I was started to think they'd never do ...the...um...thing?
xD

This is a weird ass story xD (favorites)

Oh...
my God...
I'm a huge lervery and I loved every word of that! Wow...

"THIS IS TOTALLY WHAT IT LOOKS LIKE!"

Da fuq? Why'd he pass out? He stopped feeling the water hitting his back?

XD you pervert Fang! Omg Iggy is going to kill you if he finds out!

Hey; I'd just like to let you know I've started to read your fanfic (: Despite the fact that i'm relatively new to the world of Maximum Ride (For I've only read the first novel) I've fallen in love with Figgy xD

I've read up to Chapter 23 (I'm Losing My Mind) and have to say; I really like this fic :D

However, I found some problems that should probably be brought to your attention ...

Grammar, for one. You tend to make a few spelling errors every other chapter or so. They're not huge, but they're noticeable. Perhaps, when you write a fanfic, you should have someone beta your story before you publish it? That way they can revise it for you before publishing, making sure grammar and sentence structure is fine. Honestly though; I have a tendency to make silly grammatical errors, as well, and I don't seem to notice until AFTER I've published. So I guess I should follow my own advice, no? "

Another thing is; Fang and Iggy are really OOC. I understand love can make people act differently but, the way I see it is; Iggy's far too sensitive. Yes, it's true, he IS emotional, but he's not as emotional as you portray him to be in your fanfic. And as for Fang; he's a bit too talkative and a bit too sensitive (considering the fact that he's cried several times.)

I also notice you happen to be a tad lacking in adjectives ... You keep saying "yell" or "said" ... Why don't you try using other descriptive words that mean the same thing? For instance, instead of using "said" all the time, why not trying words like "murmur", "stated", "announced", "remarked", "commented" ETC. It will keep your fanfic (and future fanfics) from sounding sloppy.

Remember; these are just light suggestions and helpful criticism, and I don't mean to offend; really! I just want to help you out a bit, is all(: And if you accept my tips with open arms, well then ... Great! I'd really like to read more from you, and I really want to see your writing shine. I always know a good writer when I see one, and I honestly think you have the talent to be one. Please reply! :D

Hugs ~ Neko(:

I read it all! I read it all! I read it all! *does little happy dance in room and looks at clock* Crap, when did it get so late? I'm gonna be screwed in school tomorrow... But this fanfic was worth my time! It was great!

I read this a couple days ago, but my mom kicked me off the computer, and took it away 'til a few minutes ago, so, here I am, reviewing the last chapter of my favorite Figgy story! I loved it so so much, and I can't believe it's over!

I love you(not in the creepy way),

~Nicole~