that was awesome! so much stuff was happening and i had so many emotions running though me whilst reading it :D

Love it! I smile whenever I see you rveiw my story so I decided to reveiw yours. I love James/Lily as much as I love Hermione/Harry. Will update soon!

One-sided-relationship

P.S. I bet you hear this all the time but its kinda ironic...summer for six has 6 chaps! LOL! see u in the fanfics!

once again

one-sided-relationship

Its got a good plot, but the way you did it was so unrealistic. Like when you said that they talked about quidditch, usually people would be silent besides the sound of one of them sobbing. Then when lily was found there should have been tears and hugs and stuff, not just a simple "Lily!" from everyone. Other than a few things like that it was pretty good.

ok so i like the story but you really need to work on your spelling and your punctuation i myself am a new ff writer so i understand the puncuation thing but spelling errors... it is a nice story though

its a very nice story keep up the good work

I know this is your first fanfic. However, your spelling, grammar, and puctuation aren't good. It was actually almost impossible to read. Your characters are very stereotypical and how likely do you think it is that James's two best friends will end up with Lily's two best friends? Also, James didn't have a sister. No matter how advanced magical children are, they don't start Hogwarts early. Candy and Missy are very American names, and this takes place in England. Overall, your story is unrealistic and, I think, not well written. Plus, why would you keep Peter out of it? I know he wasn't attractive and that therefore foils your well-placed plans of a triple-romance, but he was a part of the Marauders. So far, your story seems to have no aspect of J.K. Rowling's Harry Potterverse in it, and if this is the kind of story you want to write I suggest something else. If you'd take my constructive criticism and go with it, I'd be happy to read another of your stories.

hm well it was pretty good...the characters were really really stiff though and their responses to certain situations were kind of unnatural... like when james finds out that lily was meeting w/ snape he flipped out and yelled at her. but when he finds out she's kidnapped he didn't seem quite as worried. and also when they finally find lily she wasn't worried at all and acted really happy even though she was so weak she could barely walk.

*comicrileef*

hmm well overall it was very good. the dialogue was kind of stiff though and when the girls got their puffixs they all reacted the same way. you should try to add some variety to your characters bcuz most ppl would react differently to the same situation

it seemed to short

hello...

I like your story and you have really good ideas. Some parts I have notoced seem a little rushed and kinda sounds like some parts were cut off. Some parts need to be explained a little bit more so their reactions don't seem so dramatic but I have to say...

all that aside, I LOVE IT!

You have heaps of good ideas...

I love the riddle!

Anyway... good story.

Bianca

I like the story a lot, but I found some mistakes with spelling (scince) and a case of typing the wrong word (she wore a necklace her parents gave her before she died) I think it should say before they died.

good, i really like it, u just might wanna think about editing

Th12

it's good, but the last part seemed really rushed. It's still good, I can't wait to see what happens!

Arya

please update!

I'm dying here

o that was alot to take in. If you would just go into a lil bit more detail, the story would be excellent. I can't wait to see what happens!

Arya