This is a good start. I love how edward doesn't want bella to goto an orphanage

Omg you can't just leave it like that
You just lost a fan for your fiction

Please update soon

WOW intense ! I can't wait for the next chapter :D

love it

update soon!

I like it! update soon! :)(:

update !

short but sweet

im really sorry about your ferret but u should keep writing u hav a really good story :)

are u ever going to update this story cuz i think it's really good.!

I had four favorite parts:

1) Esme's Revenge against Rosalie:

“Poor Rosalie!” I laughed. After another few minutes I was able to stop laughing. Edward had told me that Rosalie was at the mall, after he told me that she even existed.

“And now, Edward, Do pray tell, why did she do that?”

“Esme dyed Rosalie’s hair lime green because Rosalie had wanted to get rid of Esme’s swimming pool.” I cracked up. I had quickly learned here that Esme was protective of her heated pool. Rosalie had had to walk around with lime green hair for months. “And that is why you don’t mess with Esme’s swimming pool.” He concluded.

“Now I’m scared.” I said with a grin.

“All of us are. Esme can be mean when she wants to be.” He smiled widely.

“I hope I survive...” I laughed.

“I do, too.” He said, his smile gone for a second. I grinned. “What?” He asked, confused and interested as to why I was smiling again all of a sudden.

2)Tickles:

“I just realized something.” I said.

“What?” He asked.

“Nothing.” I said to tease him.

“What?” He asked, getting angry.

“Nothing! I swear!” I said, feigning innocence.

“If you won’t tell me… I will force it out of you!” He started tickling me.

“Never!” I shouted. It was hard to breathe from laughing so much.

“I will get you to tell me!” He shouted.

“I will never tell you!” I shouted, “You’re powerful, but I will stand strong!” I laughed.

“That is where you’re wrong, I will win this battle.” He started laughing with me.

“You think you’ll win, but I only have half of my forces out there!” He fell onto the ground, laughing and rolling around. “Oh, and I won with only half of my army?” I asked jokingly.

3) Alice teases; a typical sibling thing to say:

“I leave for less than an hour, and you guys get all mushy, I’ve noticed.” Alice said, smiling, “Edward, our food’s downstairs. Here’s your food.”

And 4) Mall Chaos/Torture with Alice:

I asked Alice about going to the mall; that was a bad idea. She dragged me in and out of stores for hours on end. I was very sad to say that she wouldn’t let me pay for anything either. She might as well have bought everything in the mall. Then, she went to my house and threw out every clothing item I had that she hadn’t just bought. I felt bad for Edward, who’d had to carry everything, the new and old. I felt bad for myself, because, when I finally stopped moving and changing and everything else Alice had in store for me, I couldn’t feel anything. Someone could have scratched me with a knife, and I wouldn’t have known. Edward sat down net to me.

“Why did you have to pick the mall?” He complained to me.

“You could have warned me.” I said, “I thought we could have just walked around and things like that. I didn’t expect Alice to buy everything in the mall.”

“If you put Alice within a mile of a all, don’t think it’s going to be okay.” He said, “You know, Alice was prohibited from a mall.” He said.

“Why?” I asked.

“It was a cloudy day in Las Vegas, and Alice saw Las Vegas’s biggest mall. She went in, and literally came out with every buyable thing in there. All the costumers started complaining.” I grinned.

“I would figure she would do that.” I said to him, “She seems like she would, after today.”

I REALLY like this story.

so sorry about your loss

love the story, though.

-beverley

omg. I fell so sorry for you. I hope thoings get better. I'll pray for you.

I love this story! I am so sorry about your ferret, it sucks to loose a pet. I hope your dog gets better soon though, for the holidays!