this is my ultimate favorite fanfiction story :D

Nice idea, but she wouldn't know she was pregnant a couple days after. Also, why the hell didn't they kill Voldemort once he was passed out? Lack of honor would be forgivable in that moment.

If you want to be a writer you need to learn not only to spell but also how to properly format sentences. You repeat yourself far too many times and sadly this makes you sound, for lack of a better term, like a dimwit.

This is a really cute story. And it has so much potential! I know you wrote it years ago, but you might want to consider having it edited. It's a little hard to read. I really like it though!

great about the children?

It was okay... but you really need to edit it. There are hundreds of spelling errors, grammar mistakes, and wrong words used... honestly, it was painful to read, and would be much more enjoyable to read if it was edited :)

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MrsJamesPotter1

awww, the last part was sweet! I like it! especially with Draco around! The story was nice! Keep up the good work! :)

hey! that was a totally wicked stroy! i loved it! i liked the twin idea!

This sounds considerably like a revised(your) version of Wind and Waves by HeroOfTheCastleOfMarble,but I'm sure it'll turn into you're own plot,which I'm sure will be certainly ingeniously entertaining. :)

I like it...I really like it...:)

Great Work... :)

i love it

Aw! This story is really cute I like it! :]

this is realy good