Reviews for The first crime |
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julia chapter 1 . 6/24/2008 yay, ben to the rescue! i like how he's so opinionated about it. he's very strong and doenst take albert's crap. |
gilmoreluver06 chapter 1 . 6/18/2008 what does albert think of a pregnant lucy or the baby when it's born? what does ben think of a pregnant lucy or the baby when it is born? what does Albert think of Lucy being ben's wife what does ben think of lucy as his wife? what does lucy think of albert? what does think of lucy? will albert help them out at all during the pregnancy or after the baby is born? where are the grandparents and what do they think? what role does Albert play in Lucy and Ben's lives? |
PhantomErikPhan chapter 1 . 6/18/2008 GO BENNY! that was interesting |
x Lost Hero x chapter 1 . 3/14/2008 cute. albert's fat. xD |
evilangel-001 chapter 1 . 2/24/2008 hurt my wife again you’ll pay for it with your life That seems like an ominous foreshadow, it does. I like your stories. Their short, sweet, and to the point. :) |
misaoshiru chapter 1 . 2/19/2008 Interesting idea. |
maybesomedaysameen chapter 1 . 2/14/2008 YAY! Ben the hero! |
Addison chapter 1 . 1/28/2008 Hey! AwEsOmE sToRy! |
Mandy of the Amoeba chapter 1 . 1/28/2008 Nicely done, although I think there maybe could be a little more conflict towards the end...maybe we could see what happens to Nellie once Albert gets home. Same note on the formatting; each time a new character speaks, there needs to be a new paragraph. |
Nikkirenzo59 chapter 1 . 1/18/2008 o that was really good! I loved how you made them talk with an accent. The one thing you could make better though is that when someone new is talking, you are soposed to start a new paragraph. Other than that its very good! :D |
Kido Aeyka chapter 1 . 1/17/2008 Wow, nice one-shot! Benjamin's so protective. I like. :3 |
PhantomsDaughter13 chapter 1 . 1/17/2008 Interesting! A little short for my taste, but it was good! ~*~PhantomsDaughter13~*~ "Quel esta, a'maelamin..." |
Bella1093 chapter 1 . 1/16/2008 Wow, Benny got some strength :) very cute |
Inu-midoriko chapter 1 . 1/15/2008 XD Nellie's hot. |