Juuri and haruka are couples in the canon. I don't see what the problem is writing a fiction on them. They make an excellent couple as far as im concerned.

awsome chapter but i was wondering are there going to be more vampire knight stories like this one ? are there going to be more haruka x juuri stories and yuuki kuran's twin stories and more haruka and oc stories or vampire knight stories iam sorry iam talking to much

i liked it. It was good, really.

This was beauitfully written thankyou

So kawaii! I loved it.. :)

I loved it! :D

There aren't enough stories with Haruka/Juuri love!

It was a great read!

~Ashlyn

I love analysis and philosofy story! I hope you make one like this again later!

I DO like this story. It discusses a rather interesting topic, after all. The whole incest debate makes for a lot of food for thought.

Besides, it's fun to think about Juuri playing with her brother like she does in the end.

Umm.. 1) why is the Bible in this? I mean, just a leap here, but the weapons are labeled stuff like "holy cross" so I'm guessing they ain't very Christian...

2) I like that you're trying to develop your characters, but you need to show them doing something. Action! Plot! All that good (and very necessary) stuff...

3) You're trying very hard to describe things, but remember LESS IS MORE. Stop trying to be literary and just tell it like how you'd see it. Stick to one sense at a time, and be careful not to over-mix your similes. Because, the way you have it now, a lot of your descriptions just plain don't make sense... If you really think they do make sense, I'd suggest you get someone to proofread for you.

i.e. Instead of: "He caught a light whiff of spicy cinnamon and wild flowers of the plains sprinkled among the silken strands of her hair, delicate collarbone, and the mysterious unexplored soft skins underneath her dress."

Try: "He caught a whiff of cinnamon, spicy and a little sweet. For some reason, it made him want to braid wildflowers into her silky hair, and kiss her soft skin."

Awesome! -

It's so well done! I love how you incorporated the Bible as well.

awsome that was great and really interesting and quiet sweet , i hope to see more juuri and haruka storys from you , but i have quiet an interesting story in mind and if you would like to help me write it i shall be most gratefull , for i dont know where to start , it's about a young yuuki (when her parents where still alive) and her first craving for blood after she wakes up , and kaname is the one to help her , i would be gratefull if you could get back to me on the subject and if you would like to know more on the subject

Oh...I loved it..and why anyone would flame you over incest would be crazy because you analyzed it perfectly. At certain points in our history incest was perfectly fine and according to history it probably will be again (history goes in circles - if you do not learn from history you are destined to repeat it). You brought beauty, history, analysis, and a hint of young love to a well written story. You should be very proud of yourself, BRAVO!

Whoa... this was awesome, fantastically written. I envy the 'complicated' language you used in some of the dialogue, it really upted the quality of the story and made the characters truly seem noble. Bravo!

I really liked this it was really cool and smart!