PAIN NOT PEIN.

Quick note. Sennin is a term for a ninja who had mastered sage arts (SENjutsu NINja). Sannin was the term you meant to use, being the title granted to Orochimaru, as well add Jiraiya and Tsunade, by Hanzo. Sannin literally meaning three ninja, San being Japanese for 3 (SAN NINja).

Okay, this chapter made no sense. First off, there is no possible way to tell someone had convicted within hours. The egg wouldn't have even been fertilized yet. Also, despite Kabuto's impressive medic skills, he wouldn't have been able to identify something like that mid fight, much less who the father was. His chakra scalpel has no analytical abilities. I did consider the possibility of it being a bluff, but Kabuto had no way of knowing they'd had sex. In truly at a loss for why Naruto didn't try and heal her like he did Hinata. So yeah, that whole scene was just garbage; being fanfiction can't salvage that.

One thing that's just personal is how you underestimated Yugao. Kabuto might claim to be on Kakashi's level, but I really don't believe that. At least he never showed it. I'll give you that this is fanfiction, but she's tough. I also don't understand why her grudge got Hayate was against Kabuto and not the Sand.

One other thing. A weaker Naruto cleaved straight through one of the legendary seven swords. Why can't he do the same against this guy's sword, it makes no sense unless he has a zanpakto. Inconsistencies like this can't be ignored.

You created a bit of an inconstancy. Last chapter kakashi acted as though he knew why Yukie didn't want to go home, hinting that he knew her true identity. This chapter, Kakashi seemed totally surprised to find out who she truly was.

I honestly hate they sasuke has a sword to. It makes that Naruto has one far less special.

Lastly, Naruto's whole, "you're future is death," line seemed a bit heavy and out of character. I get that with his dragon he's taking in a more serious personality, but something like, "you'll never win," or, "you'll never hurt Yukie again," would flowed better.

Great story. Got confusing near the end though.

Your boring

I was so enjoying this interesting story, until you went and wrecked it. Strong and skilled enough to beat Gaara (opposed to canons luck), strong enough to break through that seal, but... not strong enough to survive being bitch slapped? Even the dragon had no idea? I mean, weak and stupid? Who needs dragons if that's an example of one?

Ew dude, why a entirely black outfit with a TURTLE NECK?! That's gross

good story, I liked it, best regards, see you, bye!

sasuke gets ryujjin jakka? and the story turned boring

I like the story but kakashi is an idiot in a world where tailed beast and giant summons he thinks dragons are a fairy tail.

Lame

you have a good writing style and everything flows nicely but this story died for me for two reasons, 1. you started giving everyone their own special dragon sword. and 2. you started pushing a multi-relationship that was entirely unnecessary with a frankly boring character. I will admit my opinion is flavoured by the anime where I can clearly remember who Hinata is and most other characters in this story, by Tenten is not even a blip on my memory, a completely forgetable character

Great story.

The super powerful Grass ninja, who was actually Orochimaru in disguise, thrust his flaming fingers into Naruto's unprotected abdomen, crying, "Gogyo Fuin!"
... am I the only one who read this and say the alternative meaning cuz... fml