this is shit you have made ash seem like the biggest idiot in the world he may be dense but he isn't thick

This story isn't terrible... for poor middle school writing, at least. Grammar is shit, story is shit, dialogue is shit, and it doesn't actually have anything to do with pokemon, but I mean it could be worse. Probably.

i think ash and may should get together and make the story approximately 30 chapter long

This is some good stuff here hanging on every word, just ah every time ash haves hope in being her boyfriend he doesn't sees that he should really move on, as chapter 23 was like a beggining to understanding, like he sort of knows what's going on he's not going to get the girl he's after. Anyways again good writting and keep it up! :3

Please update soon! I know it's been like 2 years, but I'm still putting it on my alerts list, and I would love to see this updated! It's a great story and I hope you have the inspiration in yourself to continue!

UPDATE!

Interestingly complicated, this story is (IMO) the best Poke/Advance/Pearl story in the FF shelves.

Too many angles from Misty, May and Dawn, and yet Ash is the simple one, and he's right in the middle of it all! But at least Dawn is about to clear things up for him immensely.

'Til next time...

Ash and Dawn have to be together!Have May be with Misty,I guess she's alone...

I think in the end Ash should go out with Dawn. She didn't get as jealous as Misty and she wants Ash to figure out who he wants on his own instead of forcing him to choose her.

Great story! I'm voting for advanceshipping.

But where's Pikachu? (I hope Drew won't show up later!)

Is Ash still a trainer? What is he doing now? That's so many questions unanswered there!

please continue it, its awesome so far

there will be more right hurry and update soon if your still wrighting at all

will u be posting another chapter up soon?(im not rushing u)

Wow great work as always. This fic never ceases to amaze me. Misty is being a total bitch about this... and it seems May is STILL taking advantage of Ash...

Dawn, she's the one who should be with Ash. Unlike May and Misty she isn't being a bitch about everything, she's calm, rational and truly helps Ash through and through without much conflicting emotions of her own. So I say Dawn but it's ultimately up to you.

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