Padawan Lynn, there's an error here. Griffin killed Kestrel with cowardice, but in the next sentence you say Kestrel and Reaper take Griffin out.
Change it

Seriously even at life and death situation if you threw the balding-curse i'd LAUGH, hahahah

Too bad, it kinda useless for Voldemort, no? *sigh*

Uh oh. Bad feelings, BAD FEELINGS.

Love this fic tho. I always like when Harry takes care of the Marauders. The only problem I have with this fic is that it ends. ;)

Please feel free to ignore this as the minor flame it is.

Geez, Harry name drops his dead family to everyone he meets. You'd think he'd be a little more reclusive about them.

That doesn't really bother me though, what does is that you didn't actually explain how people knew that Harry was a time traveller. If that was intentional and you will address it later, fair enough. If not, I hope you could maybe add something to explain how people know what should be a secret?

Dang. You wrote that really well. And I am now planning out how I would destroy Ron Weasley. I literally want to kill him myself.

I know you’ve probably had many requests to complete this fanfic, but please do consider completing this story. It’s really interesting and I would love to know how it ends. Hope all is well and you are staying safe in these trying times.

Wow, it's been seven years, since you last updated. Here's to hoping that you come back and finish this masterpiece. I've read my fair share of HP fics and yours is one of my faves. I'd always wondered what would have happened if Harry'd gone back in time and the Marauders included Severus instead of Pettigrew.
As for you writing a sequel, I would think writing one where Orion remains as he is and Harry is born of Lily and Severus instead, would see the whole Harry, Ron drama play out. Where Harry befriends Draco and Neville, along with whatever cousins and siblings his parents give him. Not to mention godsiblings, if Sirius gets his act together and marries.
And who's to say another Dark Lord doesn't crop up in the in between years of the Marauders and their families growing.

Hope to see an update from you in the near future.
-ScarletWraith-

I Love this hope to see a update soon!

This is so well-written but I still can't believe what you made Harry needing to change. Ron and Dumbledore are my most hated characters, even more than Umbridge and THAT is something I wouldn't have expected for a time-travel fanfic. I cried the whole chapter and now I'm still crying. But one thing: I was really confused there in the beginning. Hermione instead of Ginny, Pettigrew and Dumbledore and Snape,...lived, Daniel and Sirius as twins instead of James and Albus with a one-or-two-years-difference. But still, IT'S SO WELL-WRITTEN!
Yours
Blackbob

I hope, that one day, you continue with this story.

Didn't Nagini die when the House fell on her?

Wasn't the locket not placed until Regulus was a death eater?

I know you said not to ask when the next chapter is out but it's been like 8 odd years so... When is the next chapter out? Also, the chapter didn't seem stilted to me, it was great.

Thiught that Nagini died when the manor collapsed onto her? Unless it's Nagini the Second, like when parents get their kids replacement goldfish lol.

I'm a little disappointed in your handling of the fight scene. It dispelled my feeling of belief in the story as the children kept getting back into danger. It is unrealistic. The chapter has been well written though and your ideas were good.