Reviews for Becoming a monster |
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Dear author chapter 1 . 2/10/2019 “What kind of girl doesn’t like pink?” “The best kind” - Right. Cause that makes her better, smarter, kinder and just more than us. Why do they always bash us pink-lovers? |
MysticalForever chapter 25 . 10/9/2018 For an imprint story this is ok - not bad but not great either. There are a few things that "defiantly" need editing but overall it was a nice read. Throughout the story there were some glaring discrepancies though. I feel like you switched back and forth with characters' personalities maybe in effort to make them more relatable. But Paul kept going from angry and hot-tempered to sometimes calm and collected. Your OC, Maggie, is 100% relatable - props for that. It's their relationship I personally found somewhat unrealistic. They don't seem to work together for me at least. He just says he loves her but never in the story did I feel like "Yeah, boy, you go get her!" you know encouraging him or loving him (his character, I mean). His character is written a little bit poorly and not at all good for Maggie imo. Thank you for the read, though! |
Bikergirl941 chapter 1 . 1/1/2018 You do realise 'defiantly' & 'definitely' are 2 separate words? |
LadyBelladona chapter 1 . 12/19/2017 how can she say she doesnt like Forks for the bad rainy wheather yet she is going to England for collage...a place well know for its BAD, RAINY WHEATHER...? |
LadyBelladona chapter 1 . 12/19/2017 i already hate the oc...i love my grandparents...she seems like a heartless b*tch |
Guest chapter 1 . 12/16/2017 Like the introduction to Laura's gang instead of the same old thing with Bella's friend group |
Guest chapter 25 . 1/16/2017 Oh my god! I just finished the epilogue and I LOVEED IT! Favorite Paul imprint story of all time. Your writings skills are really good! I was addicted to this all day! I couldn't stop reading it! I'm glad you finished it too. It's annoying how sometimes you find a story that you like and only to figure out that it wasn't finished. |
Lucy Elizabeth Jefferson chapter 8 . 11/15/2016 i thouht this was pretty good |
Meg chapter 25 . 10/14/2016 Loved it |
Anon chapter 22 . 2/17/2016 Paul is really being the perfect boyfriend. |
Anon chapter 17 . 2/17/2016 I think potraying someone who represents a minority (like Scott gay guys) is difficult in stories, though it is important. But if you make a minority character stereotypical it's unfair to the fact that all humans are unique and then if they aren't any different from anybody else that's wrong too. |
Anon chapter 11 . 2/16/2016 Maggie seems really cool with it all, maybe she should have freaked out a little more. |
Anon chapter 9 . 2/16/2016 Poor Paul. Good writing. |
Anon chapter 8 . 2/16/2016 You're making me hate Sam. |
Anon chapter 6 . 2/16/2016 Sam's secrets are never to be shared is sometimes way out of line |