how could you TT CRYING

i love how u started off using the lyrics from face down. love that song! RJA is AWESOME!

You know, I don't think people really understand just how well you portrayed the passion between Kurenai and Kakashi. I mean, wow. Very rare. Personally, I'd really enjoy seeing you write another one of these, preferably with another realistic but happier ending. I prefer reading Hinata. I just can't find it in me to read portrayals of Sakura or Ino or Ten Ten. Haha, just can't.

I do have a couple questions though. I've read Toni Morrison(because of english class) before and that type of literature is not my cup of tea, but I enjoyed your story and I can definitely see a bit of her flavor in your writing. What is it that attracts you about Toni Morrison's writing?

Also I wonder, have you or someone close to you experienced this kind of passion? Because you portray it real well, almost as if you've experienced it yourself. Or did you read it in a book? If so, what book? Or other fanfiction? What inspired you to write a story like this one?

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Ringo; I love this Story alot! i read the 1st chapter months ago and i thought it was really good! glad i found it again! Im a big fan of KakashixKurenai being together!

poor kakashi... he has a hang over...

cool! :) LOVE IT MAN!

Nice story... Love it!

Once again, I enjoyed reading this chapter though it was a bit short. Then again, it was Kakashi's POV which is always direct and blunt in the vision you give of him. So, it's alright!

I especially liked the beginning where Kakashi is depicted as a womanizer who's got the habit to get girls pregnant :"She wanted 18 years of time. At least" xD

His inappropriate and almost childish reaction to bake a cake was funny: did he really expect her to eat it or did he anticipate her throwing it in his face? Anyway, it was deserved though it was not as hilarious as when Kurenai threw up in front of Anko when she learnt she was pregnant :)

Now, I'm looking forward to see his reaction when he realizes his wife is expecting a baby as well...

Wow, this one was really something! But, first, I have something to say: I WAS RIGHT AGAIN! A real twist-finder xD (Though I have to admit that I had no clue about Kakashi not knowing that Anko was pregnant).

Now, back to what I was saying... This chapter was crazily eventful and emotional and, by the way, you're really good at conveying emotions :) The magnetic pregnant goddess turns into a shrieking animal, the caring lover into a hateful and broken husband and the hopeful pregnant victim into a remorseful executioner: that sure makes a change!

I loved the way you had Kurenai guess it was Kakashi's baby :) I also liked your cynical description of the Suicide Tower. I just hope it won't give ideas to poor Kurenai... Will twist-finder be RIGHT AGAIN? xD (Maybe I should register in another type of rehab center... ;)

Once again, good job at transcribing... ow sober Kakashi with a hangover's thoughts! You definitely managed to give totally distinct voices to Kakashi and Kurenai: Kakashi's is rough and almost disillusioned while Kurenai's is more naive.

So I was right about Anko being pregnant in the end :) While reading chapter 8, I was telling myself that I didn't notice in the manga that Anko had so much sex appeal and that it had to be something like pregnancy's radiance. And I was right (I just love saying that ;)

I liked the end of your chapter: very original way to say "congratulations"! I would have prefered Kurenai to throw up on Anko's shoes though ( Sadistic? Me? No...). I hope for Kakashi that it isn't the sign of another twist in your plot/pregnancy ;) (Yes, I ran away from the rehab center this morning...)

Wow! Asuma is a violent and possessive freak, Kakashi is alcoholic and Anko is pregnant -well, that's how I translated "sick" but I may be wrong: that sure makes a drastic change in the Naruto world!

I noticed it before and it appeared again at the beginning of this chapter: your writing can sometimes be physioligical, almost biological if you get my meaning. For instance, "Kakashi is wrapped in cellophane bags of skin","bitter premature hooks digging into his flesh" or "a hot rush of furious bile washes up against my teeth". And Kurenai seems to play the part of the biologist studying a new "specimen". I feel like all these physical details give a dark and modern taint to your style. Well, I guess I might as well start an essay on your fic now :D So you kept up the suspense again! I was actually expecting the twist of the mission but not the separation (which would be justified if my pregnant Anko theory was true)!

There is one thing I don't get though: why are they fearing to be exposed by Tsunade? If they want to mess up with their private lives, she shouldn't interfere, should she?

(See, no naughtylike winking smileys! I'm actually in rehab for winkingsmileyholics: it was hard to resist but I did it! Just one, please! ;) There!)

I like the manner in which you sublimate ordinary matters: for instance, instead of just writing "They discussed for an hour" you write "The bitter stabs of periods, the sarcastic turns of commas and the jagged way their sentences joust against one anothers like a skeleton struggling to fight its way out of its skin"! I may repeat myself but that's what I enjoy in your writing: it seems so inspired :) I also liked the end bit with Kurenai saying the "baby" word: even if we knew their relationship was more serious than what they expected, it makes the change official. That was a nice "little twitter" ;)

At first, I didn't really get what the beginning of the chapter was about. Then I realized it was drunk Kakashi's thoughts and all I can say is that you've done an excellent job in transcribing them: the never-ending sentences with almost no ponctuation and no capital letters... You managed to give him a different voice from Kurenai's, more down-to-earth, cynical and dark. But they still share the fact that they both feel misplaced in their respective relationship and seek refuge in their affair. The least that can be said is that they like to take risks: the power of adrenaline I guess ;) I'm not sure I got it right but is Jiraya supposed to be with Tsunade here?

Okay, now you really got me into it! Your descriptions of Kurenai's love for Kakashi and disgust for Asuma just feel so right and are beautifully done:) Asuma is still as scary and seems slightly psycho: why the hell is he offering her a stuffed cat? And it seems to me that Kakashi is much more attached to Kurenai than what she thinks: why would he take the foolish risk to beat Asuma up and give away their relationship if he didn't? In short, a really nice chapter again!

So I was actually right about Kurenai cheating on Asuma! Talking about him, I never suspected he could be such an evil and scary guy... I still love the way you manage to convey Kurenai's emotions through your one-word sentences going crescendo and through the use of repetitions. "And loved the troubles off of each other on the living room floor": I loved this one, so nicely said :)