I will say this luthor brings this story down a lot, he is to cruel for this type of story you would be better off with a villian like Bowser or maybe a antihero like deadpool. I was hoping for something like the the story bondage style which was a funny story with unfortunately no Shippuden sequel.

This would be better if he had his actual mother teaching him

Naruto fights like reigen from mob psycho 100 lmao

Great job

i like your first version from this story at the most.

please update please update pls updateplease update please update pls updateplease update please update pls update

i like this story its funny. its use of classical comedy is highly amusing. i have to ask will there be a prank war?

from mortal kombat 2

cool. can not wait for it, but please try and get back to where the story was soon

dude your fic is hilarious and I practicly laughed my butt off in most of your jokes (I think my face is still red) anyway I really hope you finish this

If i'm dueling you, and a friend of mine walks in and stabs you in the back, that's cheating.

If we're having a contest of wits, and you take a mind-enhancing drug, that's cheating.

In sports, if you give yourself artificial advantages, that's cheating.

Hinata and Naruto cheated.

And if you're arms are cut off, you can't wield a weapon. Likewise, if you're chakra points are F*CKING CLOSED OFF you aren't moving, no matter how much chakra you have. If I pour concrete over the entrance of a tunnel, no car is getting past, no matter how many or how big. And we all know what happened when Zaku's chakra built up behind closed-off points.

Kaboom. Instant loss of arms.

Round 2!

Sad. Absolutely sad. You'd think that instead of standing around, Kurenai, Ino, and Shikamaru would intervene when they say Naruto, in their observation, molesting a 12-year-old girl. Really.

Oh, and mindset/psyching up has no impact when the levels of the combatants are so mismatched. If I have a AK-47, and you have a slingshot, no amount of encouragement is going to cause the outcome to not be your bullet-ridden corpse.

Fact: Neji is a genius. Hinata just isn't as good. Neji can stop your heart in an instant with Byakugan. Hinata isn't that good. Neji is better than Rock Lee AND Sasuke, both of whom can take out Naruto in an instant in canon at that point. After all, Naruto only has clones, and those take huge amounts of chakra.

Naruto should have died long ago. If a whole city hates him, there's going to be one or two fanatics who'll lop off his head with a kama or something. After all, Gaara was almost killed by his family, and Naruto has always been alone...unprotected. No ninja is skilled enough to protect a child in a marketplace from a sneaky, well-placed knife.

So, uh, you write well, but this plot sucks.

Just so you know, banana peels aren't actually slippery. Not unless you soak them in oil first, but most things are slippery in oil.

Also, laughing gas doesn't cause laughter, it's actually a VERY mild general anesthetic.

Also, I find it hard to believe that ninjas who can survive stab wounds and massive blunt trauma and tissue damage can be taken down with a rubber chicken, since chakra, spirit energy, isn't solid. True, it can interact with actual matter, and others' chakra, but in the show, we see MANY cases where chakra-enforced weapons and massive area attacks do jack squat.

Even assuming banana peels cause slipping, Kiba would have fallen backwards, not towards Naruto.

Also, WHERE IS HE PULLING ALL THIS CRAP FROM!

And pie doesn't actually cause obscuration of vision. It falls off easily, and the simple reflex known as blinking protects the eyes.

If you plan to use glue later, know that glue doesn't actually cause instant sticking. If it does, it's no longer glue, it's tar.

Just because it's comedy, doesn't mean it has to be completely ridiculous.

I respect your authorhood, but the same thing that gives you the right to write also gives me the right to criticize your plot in any and every way possible.

Also I am bored, and i hate Naruto's character.

Seriously, a harem? No girl wants to share with others, and I doubt that those girls will want to be "sleeping" with chakra clones.

In other words, I hate this story. You're a good author, but...just no. Please stop thsi farce.

Oh snap! I can see it now... Orochimaru as... The Joker!

AND THAT'S THE BOTTOM LINE, BECAUSE ROCK LEE SAID SO!