Just finished chapter 4, so far it is excellent and it's nice to see that some fan fiction authors know battling mechanics

A slight Twist from usual Ash Misty confessions... but it's still cute.. and it's little different from other similar fics... good work.. :-):-):-)

I wonder how long it will take ash to figure out his feelings.

I wonder what Cresselia meant when she said the lunar wing doesn't heal all of nightmare's effects? And what's with Misty?

Yeah, I think Cresselia would be a pokemon that uses telephaty or was it Talephety? I'm bad with words sometimes.

The situation isn't looking very good now. Wow, so Ash's dream was sorta a vision of the future. Can't say I blame Brock or Dawn what Ash said is pretty Farfetch'd.

Dense as ever that Ash.

epic, this was! Awesome!

I absolutely LOVE your style of writing. IOt's so unique and refreshing and it immedialty just pulls you into the story without hesitation. I'm a humongous AAML fan and I also really love Pokemon so I love reading fan fics because you can come up with almost any idea. And with each new idea, a new adventure follows and begins so being a writer is one of the most important jobs.

I don't really think that your writing Misty emoish, i think your writing her charcter great because in some fan fics some of the charcaters don't act like what they would actually act like in the Anime.

Ash is the deterimed, food gobbling soon to be Pokemon master, Dawn is the girly girl shouting addict and Brock is the perverted older brother. And of course Misty is her friendly, argumentative, determined, mallet hitting self so you've put the charcaters together very well and i mean it sincerely.

I really want to becom an authour when i'm older, it's like my life's ambition and by reading AAML and othere books my passion for writing gets more intense and your writing is really inspiring me. But enough about me, I love the first chapter and i know how hard it can be to start writing something and then have the whole chapter planned inside your head and then when you actually start typing and writing the chapter doesn't exaclty come out as you orginally planned it. But i think the plot is great and the charcaters are inetresting and vibrant. YOU ROCK! Keep up the fantastic work!

Well... if you want my honest opinion, then I'll have to say that this story isn't as good as some of your other ones. Hoever, it's still really good! Good luck with all of your work!

The chapter wasn't awful, but the battles were a little shabby. The rest of it was fine! Really!

Haha! That last sentence, the words that got cut out by were "hard" and "on". Man, , assuming the worst, aren't we?

Hallo! *waves* I thought I'd finally get off my lazy butt and check out some of your fics. I haven't been disappointed! :-) Since the fic is over, I'm going to try and review it all in one shot:

Firstly, I thought the ending was perfectly sweet and perfectly appropriate for Ash and Misty. Like you said, the 'declarations of true love' are not only often inappropriate for the characters, but also abrupt, ill-fitting, and, worst of all, get a bit paint-by-numbers in the various AAML stories. (Y'know the type: Misty gets upset when they fight (as though it's anything new that they FIGHT), runs off, Ash follows, TRU LUV follows.) I found this one much more...organic, I think would be the word. It felt natural. It also fit extremely well with Ash's character, because he's not one to keep his thoughts to himself-he's just starting to figure out how he feels for Misty and it's very in character for him to share those feelings out loud as he discovers them one at a time. He's not a secretive person.

I thought you did a good job with the battle scene in Chapter 4. I know a few others said it was rushed but honestly, long battles in fics are boring. It's one of those cases where words can really only do so much to help form the picture. Action scenes in general are really hard to write (at least that's my opinion) and I thought you did a really good job of it in both the gym battle and the scenes with Ash and Misty on the island.

I think you're extremely creative and have great, original plot ideas. I wish this one had been fleshed out a bit, because it felt like a whole lot of plot in only a few chapters, y'know? However, I'm simply pleased to see new, fresh ideas that haven't been overdone to death (see above description of 'classic' AAML fic idea).

The last thing I'd like to say is that you need to have more confidence in yourself! Quite a few chapters here you call bad/crappy at the end, or say that you're unhappy with how it turned out. We're our own worst critics, and pointing attention to problems in the fic often draws attention away from what is done well or right (and much here is done well and right). For example, if you hadn't pointed it out yourself, I doubt anyone would call you out for being too dialogue-intensive. Don't be so hard on yourself; you're a very good writer! :-)

WHAT THE FUDGESTICKS? How can it be OVER? NO! Oh well, great story anyways! But now Misty's all better and that makes me happy! :)

Lol, stop bashing your own fic it's fine. Great job, its a good idea and something different. Something that would probably happen in a show, not actually saying I love you but giving off a big hint.

This is Future AJ Saying

Peace Out