Such a shame, though I know it has been discontinued from the start you should have atleast added another chapter since the climax really got me into this one.

Ahhh... that time you try to insult someone but end up complimenting them. So awkward.

Aww...it broke my heart when you said that Blood Lust was discontinuing... Although that this is a very good plot for someone who was in 5th grade. Give your 5th grade self a pat on the back for that. But...can I continue this? Or can I make something similar to this? I mean, I really like Aya...may I borrow her? I'll give you credit...please?

As a young person not willing to stand up and put her writing out for the world to see, I say these things writing my review.
(1) Age doesn't matter. You had a brilliant idea and you elaborated on it. That's more than I can say. Your style is choppy but if you went in and told us the point of view that would be an "easy" fix. Your grammar is impeccable on the other hand. Don't be ashamed because of it.
(2) Never be ashamed because of what you write, people criticize authors as to allow them to see another point of view to their story. Flames are people writing who are jealous of your brilliance or are mean to people in general.
NEVER STOP WRITING! Especially if it makes YOU happy.

"You're so food"? Did you ment good?

Nooo i need to know the rest! Please don't discontinued this! You're killing me inside TTATT

I like the Mulan reference. "They just popped out; like daisies!" That's my favorite line xD

I'm really sad to hear that this is discontinued. But I'm glad I took the time to read it. I had a lot of fun :D

I actually think it's quite good... Made me laugh too. I honestly don't see anything wrong with it other than a few typos.

Hi :)

I read How The Heart Races first, but I think this one is better in terms of Aya's personality by just a smidge... Nevertheless, both are good! Keep writing :)

Damn... If you were that good of a writer fifth grade... you were a better writer bach then than I am now. And Im in high school

Gotta go to that other improved fic so can't stay long but just saying...how could you have written fics so good in freakin' elementary school?! I barely knew what grammar was then! Still don't but that's beside the point...(clears throat self-consciously)

This...is absolutely beautiful. A work of art. Yes, I just called your fanfiction a work of art. Please please please with Aya on top of an ice cream truck, please update soon. I can't wait to know what happens next!

Please write more

Looveeed this chapter! Glad I got to read it!
I know how hard it is to update without any muse for the story, it's torture. Take your time. xx