Wow! so kawaii(cute) YAYYZ! SASUSAKU 4eveah!

oh, can u PLEASE give them more time together! PLEASE!

GOOD JOB so far!

u did wonderful for the first 3chapters my suggestion is have each group split up with eachother while being immensly attacked, that way we get to see[read] their combo's and good teamwork or lack of. keep up the good work!

Thank you for the new chapter. This chapter felt a little rushed. Slow down a little, the more you write I am sure you will get better.

You know how Number 2 (in my first review)? It should apply here also. Other than that, I love where it's going.

~Frog-Wallet

This is your first story? I think you're good with your spelling and detail (which are amazing).

I'd just like to point out a couple of things:

1. I noticed a couple of run-ons. For example, this sentence: Creeping up on her, its next and final victim. That isn't a complete sentence. Maybe if you connected it with the sentence before it, it would be great!

2. It's quite short. I don't mind shortness myself, but if you would like more people to read your story, I'd suggest that you write more per chapter.

I hope this advice helped you. Number 2 really bothered me on my first fic too. :) The story looks promising! Off to the next chapter!

~Frog-Wallet

wow aweosme plot and all please hurry up and update! b4 i grow insane