Fascinating, I also like how you made it clear that he wants Zim ALIVE. A few other stories keep making Dib jump right to "I need a gun to kill Zim with". -_- Dib's a KID, a kid raised on science, sure, but still someone who possibly feels uncomfortable with/by death. I can see him maybe cutting Zim open if he's determined enough, but I don't buy the whole, "I want Zim dead in a gory fashion" thing, no offense to those who do.

I feel vaguely sick.
I mean, you did a perfect job, but hell if I feel queasy by now.
Add a "warning: there's blood ahead" next time, please and thank you

Damn, that kid is sick. Alien or not, this is wrong! Rubbing feelers is fine, cutting a person open is not.

That was fantastic. As it kept going it gave more and more of a sense of unease at Dib's actions. By the end it had gone beyond that into flat-out disturbing.

I read the AN after I read the story, and I have to say that you definitely succeeded in portraying the themes and overall tone.

I just wanted to say that this, this right here, is one of my most favorite stories of all time. I keep managing to lose it, but I finally wised up and added it to my favorites lol.

But anyways, like I said, this story is simply amazing. The sexual undertones are handled so subtly, and it seems so much more REALISTIC than how other stories handle Zadr - with no explanation, no background, completely ignoring Dib's scientific fascination for Zim and their hatred for one another. Your story, on the other hand, meets all of these areas that so many others have failed in, and what's more, it's STILL hot.

So I say kudos to you, my friend, and I hope you're still writing~

Intriguing! And so well-written. I'd love to see more.

The way you wrote this was truely beautiful and i really do thinkk you did what you set out to do when writing this. I loved every word of this and think you are a very gifted writer.

Absolutely fascinating. Taking the physical makeup of Zim's character and actually managing to get out a competent scientific analysis of the alien body. That's highly impressive. To me. The story is well written; it takes the characters and puts them in a decent enviroment for the reactions given.

Now I'll shut up and fav.

I am thoroughly impressed by this story. Very well written, very emotional. Brings out a lot of thoughts that seem to lay dormant. Good job!

Woah. Incredible. Awesome.

It was really good. o.o my two favorite parts were the whole antenna bit and the explanation for the mouth :)

Oh that was a wonderful story, I would hate for it to end here though. more please!

You are a wonderful writer!

The end was...disturbing. Dib is one seriously messed up kid. But nevertheless, this has got to be the best one-shot I've ever read! My favorite part was with him stroking the antenna. But that's just me being the typical ZADR fangirl.

Beans

P.S. Are you ending it here or will there be more? Cuz I'd love you forever if you did a sequel or something!

Wow...And may I just say it again...Wow. This is spectacular! You are an amazing writer full of metaphors and obvious knowledge of Invader Zim itself. Have you had discussions with Jhonen himself lately? The ideas of Zim's anatomy seem so farfetched and nearly impossible to fake, but you have done a fantastic job. You pinpointed the characters to a T and even threw in back story to go along with it. This is phenomenal! I am entranced by your word choices as well, and how you weave your sentences. This is awesome. You are an excellent writer.

~Eponine Oki

First of all, I really thought the line of "natural intrusion" was cleverly placed. I felt the themes of Faust and lost childhood were nicely added without pushing them. What I would suggest is to add more of a blending. Each innuendo is almost like a stand alone, it still brings home the overall suggestive theme, but it feels choppy. And I suppose what I mean by choppy is that there is a definite pattern (especially toward the end) of a stated biological function or feature which is then immediately followed by a subtle suggestiveness (of Faust, childhood, or sex).

For example: Dib discovers the evolutionary purposes of the tongue/mouth/jaw and it is followed by the desire for more knowledge through the mosquito simile.

It makes sense and it definitely flows into the themes you wanted (and did) convey but it feel like then you continue this pattern more and more as the story goes on. Besides my insignificant nit-picking, the story was amazing. Nice job and keep it up!