Tenten temari anko samui karui karin

Can Haku be a jumper?

Can Haku be a jumper?

This story is great, and I just know that you'll find a way to save Haku and Naruto! W

Please update soon! Fallen-chan out! -

Good story... Post more!

Well.. The first two chapters were pretty good, but now that you started following canon almost to a t, it's not as interesting.

Ok, I'm not going into how annoyingly pathetic the plothole with Zylex was. Dear Kami it made me sick.

Other than that, cool idea, although the vocabulary for a five year old orphan is probably not that advanced, even if he does know tha Hokage. Keep it up, but try to smooth over the glaringly obvious plotholes will you? Try to get a feel for the story, how to make it flow naturally.

Ja ne!

The jumpers don't have to fight. But if there is somthing that threatens the world and only one Jumper is left, there are granted the power to save the world and those that have fallen. Right?

please update soon

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It was very well written. And about the Waves Country/Water Country mixup... Considering tat Water country has been embroiled in a civil war for so long, I have no doubts that there are large tracts of destitute living there.

This sounds like a cool fic so far! Keep up the good work :)

great story hope it becomes a NarutoxHarem

yoko does not mean fox, it translates to positive, so you're saying nine tailed positive. fox is kitsune.

your writing is good for a beginner writer, possibly better because you've managed to keep it organized and maintain story flow but in this chapter you've been paradoxing things without reason.

naruto developed a rivalry with sasuke in the orrigional because he had no friends wheres sasuke has all of the girls fawning over him; in your story naruto has at least three close friends so that wouldn't be nearly so big a thing for him.

In the orrigional iruka had only been narutos teacher for the past year, many authors ignore this because it would require a whole set of new charactors to show otherwise but the point is narutos justu sucked in the accademy because only iruka ever taught him properly and even then he didn't have much time for 1 on 1 like kakashi did. in your story naruto has friends who are doing the jutsu properly and would recieve propper attention from their teachers; don't you think that between narutos constant chakra control excersizes and training with FRIENDS he's have gotten himself to at least avarage?

his crush on sakura is less of a backtrack because something obviously must have atracted him to her in the first place but in your story he has two or 3 close female friends who would be trying to get the same attention from him hes trying to get from sakura, i think even he'd have noticed.

and once again, shunshin, or body flicker is a commonly used 'teleport' even by low level gennin. it looks similar enough to jumping that mizuki would mearly have been impressed that an accademy student was using it so often rather than being confused about how he was teleporting in the first place. even if shunshin is in reality only a speed technique.

yes, i like rant.