The best criticism I could give you is that you need to look up the stages of grief. and then look at it how long you as the author would take those stages when you're inlove with someone who cheated on you with your best friend. You made this too fast and pushed the characters into a relationship when you as the author dont grasp those stages. sometimes this could work. But jasper and bella barely no eachother. Yeah they both were cheated on. But in reality it takes years for most people to find a love again. Or deep secure enough for a new relationship. I love this idea though. Jasper And Bella would have potential if SM gave them a chance. I'm not mocking the pairing you chose. I'm just saying that maybe you should retry this story? And bring in more details and help paint a better picture. I'm sure your fans will love it. I'm just trying to help is all. Sometimes we need an outside source to look at our creations to give us insight of where the mistakes began? For you, it's just you didnt grasp the stages of grief. That's where it first went wrong. But despite that. I love how you paint a picture for us of what is going on. But ... my problem it just seemed a bit rush. Maybe you was too caught up with other things at the time to notice? Please come back to this pairing and rediscover the love for this pairing please.

Funny how they have lived together for like 60 years and not loved each other then all of a sudden.…..for the sake of your story...

So fucking stupid.

THROWS TOMATO

Lol she said she fell out of a window. I'm sleep

Maybe I'm just evil, but I found Jacob telling Bella "I told you so" so funny! I can't stop laughing

Edward. Go. Die.

Oh wait, aren't vampires already dead?

Well in that case, go cut yoursekf to pieces and light yourself on fire, Ed. Or I'll call the Exterminator aka Jacob.

I seriously like Rose a thousand times better now...

And...

You.

Gotta.

Love.

EMMETT!

I send love and hugs and cookies to this story!

GOTTA LOVE EMM-

*reader lights me on fire*

GOTTA LOVE EMM-

*reader throws phone at me*

I can kill Edward for you. :)

Bella: Um. And you are...?

A fangirl.

Jasper: *snorts* yeah right, those creatures haven't been around for DECADES.

*raises eyebrow*

*super sonic squeal*

That enough proof for you?

Jasper and Bella: ... RUN FOR YOUR LIVES

Time can fix everything...

Except broken hoverboards. Man, it's like those things were MADE to be be destroyed!

YOU GOTTA FREAKING LOVE EMMETT

AND JAZZY (my nickname for Jasper)

XP XD

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MENTALLY EXPLODING BECAUSE, GOSH DARN IT, JASPER JUST *HAS* TO BE SO FRICKIN CUTE

Gotta love Emmett lol...

Um, I mean that was sad! Uh, yeah.