I liked the story and use of chatacters well done! But, just a random opinion, I would've done without the Rosei X Thomas subplot because 1. Romance just doesn't really fit well with the series in general, at least in my opinion and 2. I don't see the conection this could have to the overall plot and it feels kinda useless
That's just me opinion though, don't get offended please?

I have seen your Batman fics. Can you make a fanfic on Batman: the Telltale Series, and focus on the relationship (non-romance) between Agent Iman Avesta and Batman? For the uninitiated, Special Agent Iman Avesta, in the game, "Batman: The Enemy Within", was a member of the Agency and an employee of Amanda Waller. A fan of Batman, she got to meet the vigilante in person when she was selected to help find and dismantle a criminal organization called the Pact. She is held hostage by one of its members, the Riddler. Being saved by Batman, she hugs the vigilante, surprising him. The Riddler traps them both, and tries to force Batman into an unfair game, forcing him to solve riddles to save Avesta's fellow agents, but at the cost of Avesta's hearing. Avesta willingly asks Batman to answer the Riddler's questions. How the player performs is up to decisions, but in one outcome, if Batman solved the riddles, Avesta realizes that she is deaf, leading the vigilante to embrace her in comfort. She would then be depicted as having hearing aids later on, to listen.

She has gained some attention, but not a lot, and I feel she's an interesting character to explore. Your fanfic could depict her first learning about Batman, why she admires him, and depict the scenes where they are with each other, but also add in your own conversations. You can still copy word for word from the games, but you can also add in your own scenes, like Batman having more scenes with Avesta after she goes deaf (something that never happens in the game), and possibly quietly meeting her at the hospital, and more hugs between the two (I just love compassionate Bruce). In fact, you could make it like she is still affected.

You can find a section for it on the "Batman: The Telltale series" on fanfiction...

Fantastic story. A classic.

i have a really good idea for D-10 coming back. what if some humans had found him on that beach, and repaired him, not knowing he was actually evil? it could be almost just like Megatron's role in Transformers Animated. (btw this was an AMAZING AWESOME BEAUTIFUL WELL WRITTEN MASTERPIECE WORK OF ART and you should be more than proud of yourself!

You might want to have a crossover where evil demons attack Sodor and Diesel 10 is needed to defend the rails from destruction at the hands of Demise the Demon King and his army.

You forgot one thing. Thomas could be sent to a museum for permanent display. I think that the National Railway Museum in York would accept him. After all, he is famous like the Flying Scotsman and the Mallard.

Do you think of a sequel yet?

that was the most epic Thomas story I have read. much better than the rubbish hit entertainment puts on. P.S. good job!

a very awesome story dude having Thomas, Edward, Henry, Gordon, James, Percy, Toby, Duck, Lady, Rosie, Mavis, Boco, Diesel 10, Diesel, Arry and Bert in it together. like the ThomasxRosie romance. and i am glad someone puts Duck into their fanfic so awesome.

Since there are references to those films (with long time favorites Duck, BoCo, and some characters from Season 8 appearing), I'm saying this story takes place after Season 11 (but before Season 12). But I'm still really surprised though that Emily does not appear in this story at all (she was replaced by Duck most likely for a position on the Steam Team and probably because you dislike her), and Rosie must've also taken her place as the main love interest too.

I also noticed some character personalities must've also been retooled too (Mavis for example returned to her Season 3 one but still remains a nice character).

Other than what I said above, I really, really liked this story (one of the best out there and most faithful to the source). Perhaps you can make a sequel to it?

I couldn't hold off a few tears when you described what James had on that flatbed, particularly the whistle. Just the thought of it: A famous whistle that would never be heard again. It made me feel sad.

I may be in my early twenties, but I often like to look back at those memories from watching those old VHS tapes when I was a kid in the mid-to-late 90's. Thomas has always been my favorite TV shows throughout my life. Nothing would be the same without him!

After taking a break from reading Diddy Kong fanfics, this is the best Thomas fanfic I've ever read! I have really enjoyed and YOU ARE AWESOME! XD

Best story ever, I don't believe Thomas and Rosie are in love in the actual series through

This story was pretty intense...too bad there were only tweety chapters...ah well.

excellent mate

THAT WAS FANTASTIC! TO THOSE WHO MAKE THE SHOW, GET HIM ON THE PHONE!