If it concerns Harry, shouldn’t Harry know about it?

Hábilmente? Ja, no me hagas reír que se me descose una tripa.

Creo que no leíste bien los libros ni prestaste atención a las películas si tienes tan pobre caracterización de los personajes. Frodo jamás habría actuado así tras la muerte de Gandalf. No se que pasa por tu cabeza.

Gandalf de JRR Tolien tiene una calidez que no posee El Dumbledore JK Rowlin. Dicho esto, este Gandalf de TU historia parece una versión muy mala de Dumbledore.

Qué carajos Gandalf. Cual sea el secreto que le estás guardando a Harry sólo lo estás empujando Legolas para que no quiera regresar a su hogar, eso te hace peor que el pedófilo espeluznante de Legolas.

Lo repito, el comportamiento de Legolas es espeluznante

Pedófilo espeluznante es ese Legolas.

Legolas está muy extrañamente caracterizado. Parece un pervertido. No me imagino a un elfo tan elegante como Legolas desnudando a Harry con la mirada de una forma tan obscena; y en verdad todo es culpa de Gandalf por andar canalizando a su Dumbledore interno ocultándole secretos a Harry. Si le hubiera dicho que Legolas era su alma gemela, Harry no habría actuado como una doncella pudorosa y alguien dígale a Legolas que le baje intensidad a su cacería, es casi vergonzoso leerlo.

Another enjoyable chapter, so I am curious if he will gain access to his magic again

Thanks for a very good first chapter

The writing itself isn’t bad, but it’s done rather lazily. Barely any descriptions of his actual emotions, of missing his friends. And he complains about the wizarding world’s expectations of him, when the ones in middle-earth seem quite similar. Not a fan of the way this entire thing with Legolas is being presented. And Gandalf seems to be incredibly foolish and arrogant in trying to push Harry towards legolas, who is acting like a predator. And let’s not forget that Harry is still a minor, while Legolas is who knows how many centuries old. Does seem as though it will be some sort of destined lovers rubbish.

This is just so... I'll be polite and say bad. Here we have a spineless worm that was sucked into another world and doesn't even care that people know why and won't tell him. All this Gandalf shit is also annoying. Frodo's reaction was bullshit. The whole denial and "oh my world is ending because someone wants to shag me" is also terrible. I realize it is FICTION but there is no world in which these events can actually fit.
I tried to simply not say anything and stop reading but it's just too much.

Vague plot, no world building at all...very little available details. Not really all that satisfying. I've struggled through as much as I intend to. Sorry.

Thank you for this story ! ! ! !
Poor Legolas.

Your arrows are pointing not at the review button, but at the button to go to the previous chapter. Thought you might want to know that. Brilliant story by the way.