I really enjoyed this! It was interesting to see another take of Felicity in Paris - most people think that she'd live the perfect life that she wanted and not worry about anything. I don't think that she'd last in this rut for long, but I can definitely imagine her being like this for a while.

You characterized both Fee and Pip well. I agree that the last two lins were really, really good.

Well, I can certainly see why Felicity would be melancholy in Paris (having unintentionally caused the death of the love of your life can do that to you!) and I thought this was an atmospheric evocation of painful memories resurfacing. Both F and P were totally in character, too, and the last two lines are devastating.

Don't take anything too hard, it was good, but I'm a natural critic and even if it was perfect I'd still be giving some different ideas. I just saw this fiction and couldn't let it go without any reviews.

First, I don't think Felicity would be altogether unhappy in Paris. You read the books, you must have seen, she was their strength. She was their sun. No matter how difficult it would be, she would most likely adapt. And I just can't really believe any of them would really be sad for the rest of their lives after all that. The whole point was that they all became more than just being an early wife like most women. You didn't say that she was always depressed as she was in this, but you didn't say she wasn't and the beginning implied it by saying that she didn't really have a place there. I firmly believe Felicity would make a place for herself if there were none.

Secondly, I have to say soemthing with how you described Pippa and Felicity's relationship. I may be interpreting it wrong, but it sounded to me like you said they started the affair before AGATB. If you reread the books, Felicity was not always aware of being a lesbian. In the beginning she was more into flirting around with men, just not meaning anything serious (ex: Ithal). It was more the last book that she finally discovered it. She was still shy of it in the third anyway, proving she hadn't totally accepted it even then. Plus, I'm pretty sure in the author's blog she did say that in the first book she had not recognized herself to not be attracted to men yet.

However, I will say I liked the fact that you showed that it wouldn't be easy in Paris. She would have to find her place at first. Good job. Keep writing, and I'm seriously sorry if I sound like I'm flaming it or anything, I'm just a critic by nature, I mean well by it.