Nice

yay! So cute. I wish it was a two-shot.

You have a very interesting story idea. I wish you had developed it further, it would have been fun to explore it in more depth.

Beware of your grammar usage; it's hard to follow the story sometimes.

nice story. I like the way you write it. How about making it longer? hohoho. It's not that it's lacking or something. In fact it was enough. Makes our imagination play. Well, I was just thinking how about going into details? hohoho.

Great story! I loved the plot and your writing! Great work!

I really enjoyed it :)

its wonderful! kudos and good job

Nice and Sweet. The best type of one-shot. I loved it. I wasn't all that sure I wanted to read it at first but I thought what the hay and decided to. Now I'm glad I did. Thanks for writing!

Ja matta ne

no you don't have to re-write it. i like the ending, very in-character. i like this idea and your English is pretty good. I'd love to read more from you.

It would have been nicer if you made this a multichaptered story.. but then again.. the air around this fic would change so I think this being also being a one-shot is also nice..

Do continue writing more..

Ja.

CUTE!

Its actually pretty ok. Lots of grammatical errors, but its cool.

Nice story, hope if you can continue it with a sequel :D

wonderful story... really liked it... cute and sweet... would be nice if you had a one shot sequel to this one to see how they are as mates or a family... good job though... great work...

i liked it, way different from all the others. *adds to favorites*