You are very talented. This was an excellent read, very well done. Thank you for writing it!

That was fantastic, one of the best I've seen yet! Just one tiny thing though, I believe Wanda runs to the game room to hide, not the bathing room? I'm actually not sure, but that's always how I remembered it. Anyways, great job!

Ending with "I'm so sorry" made this sadder.

Good job, it mirrors the story almost perfactly, except that wanda didnt mourn in the bathing room, shemourned in the game room on the edge of the small smelly stream in there XDD No biggy, you dont have to change it, just wanted to put that out there, good job again, im lookng to possibly try to put the entire book into ian's pov, though i probably wont, you nvr know!

Brilliant.

I think this is great, You got Ian and Wanda down well the only problem I have is that Wanda was hiding in the rec room were they played soccer not the Bath room.

This was an amazing portrayal of what might have been going through Ian's mind at this time in the book. It also shows an alternative reason to why they were looking for her so frantically–I'd always assumed it was because they were worried she was going to hurt herself versus her escaping and selling them out. You're a wonderful author–I'm so glad I stumbled upon this on my friends favorite list D

~The Book Addict

I really liked this. This is a really great fic, and I love how you wrote Ian. Keep up the awesome work!

Poor Ian and Wanda. Jared, if you'd be so kind and jump in the river? Thanks so much. XOXOX ;D

I enjoyed that. I loved your line...I wanted to hit him. Badly. Wanted to wipe the face that Wanda and Melanie loved so much off of the bone.

I almost cried when I read this chapter in the book and here because I just felt so terrible for Ian. Great job, I really liked this.

This was beautiful, I loved it! I think you described Ian's thoughts very well, it was a realistic and well thought description of his POV. One minor comment: I don't think Jeb or Ian would believe that Wanda would give them away. Kyle yes, others also, but not them. But this is not important, your story was great, probably the best story from Ian's POV that I've read.

omg my eyes are watering i actually cried reading this story its so sad please tell me there is more coming up

Excellent characterization. This really seemed like what would have been going through Ian's mind. Good writing.

cool take on the scene, i really like your style. canon is also very good! I haven't read much good host fic so it was great read some quality writing.