OH NO NO NO MISSY
YOU BETTER ADD THIS TO HORROR
ARE YOU KIDDING ME
(Loved it though .)

Ew! That is so gross!

Okay, This is a great idea. I just think that you need more detail. I think you need to develop your characters more and I think that you need to develop your plot line. You need to take a look at the characters that are already developed for you and ask yourself if they would actually do the things that you have them doing. House, for example, would never "chuckle lightly". You need to work on your transition from place to place. It's confusing in the second chapter when they're at the house and then all of a sudden they are at the hospital. You didn't say that they got into a car or took a bus or even rode bikes.

And morgues don't embalm bodies. Also, someone stealing bodies from a morgue would be caught pretty quick considering that the bodies need to be identified, autopsied and claimed by their families. Even the ones that give up their bodies for science are embalmed at a funeral home before going to a medical school.

Also, why aren't the parents sick if they've been ingesting all of this formaldehyde?

And where did this whole Chase-Cameron-love thing come up? Nothing alluded to it at all.

One last thing, human teeth aren't sharp enough to go through a doctor's coat, a shirt and take a bit of flesh out as well. Our teeth are even more suited for grinding up vegetables more so than meat products.

I really think that you need to do some research when you write. Just fifteen minutes of research, contemplation and maybe outlining as well, and you will have a great story on your hands.

i liked it but the ending didn't really seem complete to me.

its good that he'ss going to stop eating PEOPLE...

and the chase and cameron thing... weird

so what happened to stasy?

did the husband ever find out?

hmm... this is like sweeney todd

omg he eats PEOPLE! lol thats what I guessed when they found the stuff in the house.. ew!

wow. thats sorta grsos...in a cool way! yay! great story!

oh! awesome! i wonder whtas in closet now!

oh i still wanna what is up with chase...

good story!1 very suspenceful!

oh. i wonder whats up with chase! the suspence is killing me! wich means its good...no its not! its completely awesome!

who he was caught doing...interesting! right on awesome story! yay!

WOW. That was extremely well-written, exactly like a House episode would be. And really creepy- I might have bad dreams tonight...IS THAT WHAT YOU WANTED? Lol.

And it totally original! I loved it. I read a story (not here, but on FictionPress) about a group of cannibals, but they were really hot, so they would charm their way into girls hearts and then..kill them...yeah...I think that's how it was. I didn't read the whole thing. But my point was...Actually, I don't know what my point was. I just wanted to tell you that...Yea...

So I have a question, did Jordan know he was eating humans? I mean, was he aware?

Can you answer in an A/N, this account isn't connected to my e-mail.

But yeah, this is totally awesome.

liked the comclusion...very exiting stuff...I wan't too sure about the Chase/Cameron bit at the end though...it seemed a bit rushed, especially with the whole Chase/Stacy thing (interesting twist, by the way)

Otherwise, I really liked this story and you wrapped it up pretty well

~CBT

It's, hum... interesting.

Yummy.

I hope there will be more soon !