Makes me sad

I like it! Very sad! but good! great work!

You're right, I do like it :)

Aww, it was sad, and very emotional, but quite good. I'm not usually a fan of song-fics, but this one was definitely one of the better ones I’ve come across. Overall, good story :)

That was really sweet. Not your best fic but it was sweet. Generally not to lie, i didn't like it that much but more for selfish reasons of Zuko being really out of character. xD The actually writing was great. That jsut anoyed me a bit. It's also sad adn the ending pulled it together well.

this is good great job

it was really sweet. Considering I'm not a zutaran, it was very cute I liked it.

Very good. You could feel Zuko's pain. I love it.

this is an awesome songfic, i love it. and thank you for the support for my FF, and do you know what Mai's last name is. I need it for future chapters in my story.

nice story u got talent and dont mind the bad one ther jealous of ya keep it up

AW! How cute! Zuko is so amazing in that fic. I would add more chapters if i were you...but that's just me

It was a very good one-shot, I think you portrayed the emotions well. One problem was your grammar. You had a lot of run-on sentences. For example, the sentence: "He thought they would be together forever but sadly Azula crushed those dreams with a single that killed her and also wounded him more so than any weapon ever could."

A corrected version would be more like: "He thought they would be together forever, but sadly Azula crushed those dreams. She killed Katara with a single attack, and wounded him more so that any weapon ever could."

Do you see the difference? It's a lot easier to understand that second version, and it doesn't deviate from its original message. When writing, don't be afraid to divide up sentences. You have a great voice, and good ideas. While some of your sentences are awkward, your ideas are not. :)

~Lionfire5224~

This made me tear up! Great writing. ~heflo

ha im stupid i accidentally added this to my favorites when i meant to review... why do they keep messing this thing up?

Anyways your review, honestly, i think it's okay. i can tell you were trying to produce a story full of emotion but there was not nearly enough put into the story. you did jump around a bit i think you should have been more descriptive and go more in depth with it, and i don't like how you said "bitter" one. did you write these lyrics? they're good, actually they're very good but i would like to know why you used the word "bitter".

Also when you described her eyes as the most "important" thing he loved about her, you messed up the flow. Replace it with a better word and it cleans up the sentence instantly.

All in all, it's not bad.

It made me cry

That's all I need to say